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23660 No. 23660
Here's a brand-spankin' new thread for Hotsauce shenanigans.

Foalin' Around with the CMC
http://pastebin.com/ua8EsvP9

Foalin' Around 2 - Electric Scootaloo!
http://pastebin.com/usE49ADs

Mare's Milk
http://pastebin.com/1gR2SbGQ

Filly foolin’!
http://pastebin.com/ezahj6a6

Twi and Me
http://pastebin.com/BnHTMp1F

Date with a Princess Part 1
http://pastebin.com/fMxzRTuT

Date with a Princess part 2
http://pastebin.com/jiGWTj18

Snapshots from the Ruins of My Mind Part 1
http://pastebin.com/E27Zy4tS
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>> No. 23667
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23667
I'm just going to sit here and wait.

...

Yep...
>> No. 23668
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>>23667
Well I can't! I'm just so exited I can't calm down! Oh God...!
>> No. 23669
THANK YOU BASED HOTSAUCE
>> No. 23673
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23673
Postin in epic bread
here have a picture of spike fisting rainbow dash
>> No. 23675
>>23673
Hot.
>> No. 23685
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23685
Finally!!!
>> No. 23688
I AM DYING XD I am chomping at the bit waiting to see a link posted...
He said one day right?
>> No. 23697
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>>23688

ONE. DAY.
>> No. 23699
Filly Foolin' 2 will be uploaded in exactly 24 hours. I was going to release it in two parts, but I decided that that was just procrastination under a different name. But I hope everyone will find the "bonus" material that's pushed the deadline back worth the tiny extra wait.

And thanks for starting a new thread for me, Dinah Moe! You're a real pal.
>> No. 23703
>>23699
So looking forward to it!
>> No. 23748
>>23699

Aw shucks, you're welcome. I've really enjoyed your stories and thought I'd help out a bit.
>> No. 23808
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>>23699
YEY!!!!
>> No. 23844
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>>23660
Come on... Come on!! I just can't... !
>> No. 23846
One last celebratory fap over FA2 tonight in preparation for the long awaited release!
>> No. 23851
>>23699
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RbViHWSazDk
>> No. 23884
Filly Foolin' 2 - Campout Capers
http://fim.413chan.net/fic/res/23660.html

Enjoy! Once again, sorry for the wait. Hope it's worht it.
>> No. 23885
Filly Foolin' 2 - Campout Capers
http://pastebin.com/u92wjYwc

Enjoy! Once again, sorry for the wait. Hope it's worht it.
>> No. 23886
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>>23885
Do like, if more time of the story would have been focused on bell or scoot would have been even better, not complaining tough. Hope we don't have to wait months for the third chapt.
>> No. 23888
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23888
You've surpassed yourself, hotsauce. You magnificent bastard!
>> No. 23892
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>>23885
Oh, it was worth it all right. Even better than I thought it'd be! Love the buildup for the upcoming chapter of Foalin'!

Speaking of which, I remember when the first Foalin' story came out. I had just come home from the War and married my sweetheart. Now that our kids are heading off to college and starting their own lives and the nest is empty, it warms my heart to see a new story in the series available. As I settle down into the placid routine of my golden years, I hope to one day read the Applebloom chapter of Foalin' before I'm ushered off into the great beyond. Until then, much like with this excellent chapter, I'll just have to have faith that it'll someday appear.

Keep up the good work!
>> No. 23903
How did DT and SP play rock scissors paper when they're ponies and have hooves?
>> No. 23908
>>23903
I felt like that part was an homage to the Powerpuff Girls when that happened xD
>> No. 23909
>>23908

Well yeah that was hilarious when that happened there.
>> No. 23982
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>>23884
Oh my god, yes! Can't wait for the Applebloom one!
>> No. 23984
Excellent story Hotsacue, as usual.

Only error I found:
"She started to crawl towards Applebloom, who watched her with wide green eyes as Spoony lifted her hooves and started to kiss them."

Wrong eye color.

Otherwise really, really awesome story. Absolutely worth the wait. Keep it up.
>> No. 24093
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24093
>>23885
I love you
>> No. 24127
I love what you do with these stories. It's actually interesting outside the clop material and can hold the reader's attention. Having some plot in the story is a real treat and not common enough in the genre. Also, thanks for the bonus "plot" bit at the end. You tied it in very well.
>> No. 24141
>>23885
Most delicious a story there, old chap! It took me a few moments to realize you were using the English vernacular for flashlight whenever you used "torch" oh ho ho, what fun!

Most excellent those two scenes were. Just capital.

Shan't be too long for your next piece of paedofoalary to follow, am I right?
>> No. 24142
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24142
>>23884
Woot! Have some Scootaloo.
>> No. 24148
Aight guyses, let's start fresh.
>> No. 24187
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24187
Soon...
>> No. 24287
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24287
Well, this fit's, I suppose.
>> No. 24391
>>23885
Wasn't worth it at all for me. I think it's the weakest (especially technically) of your other 3 filly stories, and leagues behind your Luna and Celestia stories.

No offence to you, >>23984 , but you must not have been reading as closely because there's many more errors than that. I counted at least 5, and stopped counting after those. There's closer to 10 or so if not more.
I should also say I actually decided to skip the first half, but it wasn't tons better in the second. His adult body and adult penis are just about as bad as all the baby pussy we had a chapter or so ago. Foalophile or not, that's (to me) a bit much. I won't fault you on that too much, except where repetitions could have been avoided.
Overall not bad I guess, but you've done much better before. Here's hoping you can get some of that other mojo flowing for Apple Bloom's chapter.
>> No. 24392
>>23892
That made me lol. I'll try and get my next stories out as soon as possible, anon!
>>23984
Goddamit! Should have checked the wiki.
>>24127
Thanks Dinah Moe. I try to keep the build up interesting.
>>24141
Haha. I've been trying to keep my British English powerlevel hidden - guess it's all out there, now.
>>24391
Hey Hoss. I have to agree with you that it's probably not my strongest story to date, but I'd be very interested to know what these 'errors' are. Are they typos (in which case, mea culpa!) or are they problems with grammar? If the latter, please list them for me as it's the only way I'll learn. I'd be very surprised if there were as many as you say, though. Maybe some of my British English spellings have crept in without me noticing?

Work has begun on Wall-eyed Angel and also part 2 of Snapshots. I promise to get these out sometime before the heat death of the universe.
>> No. 24394
>>24392
YAY!!!! ONLY 13.6 BILLIONS YEARS AWAY!!!
>> No. 24509
>>24392
Well the only error that bothered me was that right before Apple Bloom comes, you refer to Silver Spoon as a unicorn filly. She's an earth pony :)

I thought the story was great. The anal Sweetie Belle part was amazing.
>> No. 24510
>>24392

Hey, from now on, use British spelling only plz.

More fiction needs to have it, lol.
>> No. 24511
>>24509
>The anal Sweetie Belle part was amazing.
And here is the 70% I don't like. No offense to you Mr.Hotsauce, I am quite certain you write very well.
>> No. 24521
Yeah, I was hoping for a little Sweetie Belle vaginal action, but anal is OK too, I guess.
>> No. 24524
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24524
You know, whenever I read "Foalin' Around", given the way he describes them, I imagine them kinda like this. I mean, I didn't even know they were still suppose to be filly's until he mention the school. I really like these fics anyway.
>> No. 24525
>>24392
I know AB is the next one but fuck I need more Sweetie.
>> No. 24545
>>24392
Yeah, I'm going over post limit so I'll just make a GDoc or something for you.
>> No. 24554
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whyboner.jpg
>> No. 24643
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>>23885
Why does everypony hate Snips and Snails?
I mean, Snips is kind of annoying, and you might lose your patience with Snails, but I bet they're really good colts if you get to know them. Especially Snails. Despite his slow and overly-trusting nature, there's just a kindness and acceptance to the character. And how could you hate this face? Just look at that face! He's cute!

...That aside, terrific story. Can't wait for more.
>> No. 24702
>>24643
>once you get to know them
>you never get to know them
>eternally hated
>> No. 24704
>>24643

Only a handful of people in the fandom like those two. I think Hasbro got the hint about that too because you barely see them at all in this season. In fact, a new male pony, that fat gray one people have affectionately called "Nathan pony" seems to have totally replaced Snips & Snails.

Hopefully they both stay gone. They suck.
>> No. 24709
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24709
This is how I imagine them to look like in Foalin' Aroung. Am I weird?
>> No. 24711
>>24704
>Not liking Bob & Doug Mcpony
I shiggity diggity doo

I'll have to post that GDoc tomorrow hotsauce.
>> No. 24734
>>24704
Snips and Snails don't suck, Pipsqueak sucks. Snips and Snails are okay. I hope the writers continue to use them, because they're honestly pretty good characters. I mean, if take a glance at them, theyre annoying. But if you really look at them as characters, there's a likability to them. Why do you hate them? Because you think they're clumsy and stupid? Your precious Derpy is pretty stupid (don't deny it, there's nothing wrong with a character having low intelligence). They're voices are annoying? I love Snails's voice, and their lines are read well enough. Pipsqueak and Pinkie have annoying voices (I like pinkie okay, despite her high bubbly voice). Most people probably hate them because it's expected or they're acting shallow, I don't know. All I know is they don't deserve as much blind hate as they get.
>> No. 24735
>>24734

I hate them because back before the show started, Faust promised us the equivalent of The Gangreen Gang from The Powerpuff Girls. Everybody was excited as fuck. What we got though were Snips & Snails. It's like somebody promised you the most delicious pizza ever, you get hyped, then you are handed some lukewarm pizza roll.

I don't like them for a number of reasons. First off, they are hideous, and not in a Warhammer orc "Wow that's cool!" way. Snails has a terrible color scheme. Snips, despite orange and blue compliment each other, Snips himself looks awful with his pudgy body, crazy eyebrows, and bucked teeth. Snails looks nearly as bad. They have visual aspects working against them.

Their dialogue is shit. They have a sort of Pinkie and the Brain-esque thing going on, but since both of them are stupid, it doesn't work. You could say it's more Beavis & Butthead, but they aren't funny. They also have grating voices, making listening to them terrible.

I honestly cannot think up one redeeming quality about them. I'll admit I liked the truck noises when Snails tried to use magic, but that's it. They are otherwise totally forgettable.
>> No. 24739
>>24735
When did Faust say S n' S were gonna be like the Gangreen Gang?
>> No. 24742
>>24739

On her DA, but long before the episode aired. It was in response to if more male ponies other than Big Mac were going to appear.
>> No. 24764
>>24739

She didn't. It was that we would be getting Gangreen Gang-like villains at some point, but she never specified who she was talking about later.
>> No. 24765
>>24764
I thought she said Rowdy Ruff Boys. Who were made out of Snips and Snails, etc.
>> No. 24794
>>24764
She was probably referring to the bully ponies from Sonic Rainboom.
>> No. 24845
Here you go hotsauce, I've got a semi-public document you can check with errors. I was originally planning on putting it in this thread, but it'd take too many posts. Anything with a chevron in front of it is a quote, and you've got my explanations underneath. I haven't finished, but I've got 7 pages worth thus far and at least another 14 pages to read through. If you've got an email or something you want me to send the link to I can make the doc private. In the meantime, here you go:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tOHconDrZ6u0wemDsRmjI4EIyBsWDUbiQrC8LwsBUnU/edit
>> No. 24849
The ganggreen boys stand in villains are the diamond dogs you peabrained retards. Goddamn.
>> No. 24855
>>24845
Look, I've got to thank you for going to all that trouble on my behalf, Hoss - but outside a few formatting errors (thank you for catching those!) I'm afraid the vast majority of the 'errors' are largely personal objections to elements of my style and my choice of punctuation. Trust me when I say that I know I have the option of using a semi-colon in such-and-such a situation, but chose not to use it. Why? To me, in a story about kids having adventures they look totally out of place. In an academic essay, the reverse would be the case - I'd never use a hyphen.

Anyway, I appreciate the effort but please understand that if I edit the document again I won't be changing anything other than those formatting issues (again, thank you) and the major fuck-ups I made when I called Tiara (or Spoony - can't remember which) a unicorn pony and using the wrong color for Applebloom's eyes.

Oh, and sorry for using 'fur' again. But now I know I should avoid 'snout' as well! Still, it's no coat off my muzzle.

>>24849

I love you anon.
>> No. 24856
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24856
>>24855
Hell yeah, Hotsauce. Us hyphenlovers gotta stick together! You stick to your guns on that one- to me, semicolons say "I don't read real books, but respect my writor-itah!"

I could see usin' semicolons in Rarity dialogue, but even for narration it's just the wrong tone for most anybody.

Cheers, I've enjoyed your stories :)
>> No. 24890
>>24855
Yeah, no skin off my back either. If you intended for it to be really repetitive in areas that's fine by me. I'll be the first to agree that about 50% of my problems are of a personal nature, or things that you could have done, but the other 50 really are grammar or spelling errors. I'll clean it up with that in mind, but don't let my personal problems discourage you from wading through it to get to the real issues. I'd also object to your use of the word "style". You haven't been terribly consistent throughout your fics (unless you're referring to the filly series, and even then) and some have been leagues ahead of others. I think it's safe to say most people would agree that your Luna&Celestia stories were the best on a purely technical level, as well as in terms of content. There's areas where, for a person like me, it's not "style" but something that makes the story grind to a halt. I'll avoid going into that and try and TL;DR by saying you have a better "style" that you've used before, and this "style" is one I hope you don't use too often since, if you ask me anyways, it's the weakest in terms of storytelling.
I'll edit my doc accordingly.
>> No. 25000
GDoc's all done. Purely technical/grammatical errors. Still over 5 pages worth since I quoted stuff.
>> No. 25772
>>25000

I really appreciate the hard work. When I get a spare moment to myself I'll run up an new edit of the story, fixing the major errors and also getting rid of most of the 'but's.
>> No. 25773
>>25772
But if you get rid of all the butts, how is the Sweetie Belle scene at the end going to work? *badumTISH*
>> No. 25775
Just wondering how hotsauce's gonna top this in the sequel, given we've already had anal, which I thought he might save for the final fic.

A steamy orgy with all the CMCs, perhaps?
>> No. 25778
>>25772
You can keep the buts, but I would recommend combining them into the previous sentence. While generally and universally frowned upon, I know that sometimes you have to start a sentence with but to achieve your effect. Can't wait for your next princess story.
>> No. 26293
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26293
which fic is next? wall eyed angel, yes?
filly foolin 2 twas orgasmic BTW :3
>> No. 26398
>>26293
<s>derp</s>
>> No. 26515
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26515
Honestly, I can't wait 'till "Foalin' Around 3" comes out. Maybe something like this picture will happened (only if Applebloom is into rope tricks, of course)
>> No. 26697
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26697
so much why.

WHY.

WHY HOTSAUCE.
>> No. 26875
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RFD babysitting the CMC, but just hanging out.
Okay, it's not really him(the CMC are way to small), but I thought this was cute.
>> No. 26903
>>26875
This pic is not related to fics.
>> No. 26904
>>26903
Neither is this one >>26697
Were never giving an example on how the guy looks like, and this was the only pic of a human with a three CMC that I could find (admittedly, I didn't check that hard) There was a guy was drawing comics based on Foalin' Around, but we haven't heard from him in a long time.
>> No. 26914
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>>26875
>>26904
i couldn't help myself :3
>> No. 26923
>>26914
Oddly enough he looks friendlier now. He doesn't have dark circles under his eyes.
>> No. 27057
>>26923
and i gave him an actual grin. :D

but he looks odd in grey and without any gloves O.O
>> No. 27091
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>>“Oh, perfect timing, Cutie Mark Crusaders,” said Spoony,

And just like that, my internal Silver Spoon voice switches irrevocably to this guy's voice.
>> No. 27093
>>27091
what does he even sound like
>> No. 27132
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thought this was an appropriate place to post this
>> No. 27255
so how about a bump for question time....
how many months until the next fic comes out?
>> No. 27266
>>27255
My guess is 28 months give or take a few
>> No. 27269
>>27255
Why bump if there's no new fics?
Odds are about 2-2.5 months. Summer's coming up, so production should ramp up for everyone.
>> No. 27279
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>>27269
why bump? because it's the only way to keep you guys entertained. *starts posting porn*
>> No. 27280
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>> No. 27285
>>27279
You should post art of the other characters, just to be same. We don't want people to think this is only Twi centered. Even if she is awesome.
>> No. 27287
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27287
>>27285
>> No. 27288
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>>23660
>> No. 27290
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>> No. 27291
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>>27285
better?
>> No. 27300
Just reporting in to say that work has begun on Wall-eyed Angel; I'll be uploading another part of Snapshots from the Ruins of My Mind before that, though.
The next few months should see my work coming out quicker than usual, so you shouldn't expect the kind of lag you saw over Christmas and the New Year.

>>24856 Happy to hear you enjoy my work, Applejinx!

>>26293 Thanks ocampo! I hope you don't mind a little diversion before Wall-eyed Angel - I'm writing both at the same time, so there shouldn't be any hold up.
>> No. 27301
>>27300
Excellent, hotsauce! :D I'm pretty excited for both Snapshots and Derpy, so this is win/win for me.
>> No. 27311
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>>27300
i don't mind at all. i'm exited for another chapter of Snapshots too :D
>>27301 i feel the exact same way :3
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This pic fit's this thread nicely, I think.
>> No. 27320
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>>27315
indeed it does. :3
>> No. 27321
>>27320
But, there isn't a human and Fluttershy story here.
OH WELL!
>> No. 27322
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27322
>>27321
...fine. here :p
>> No. 27327
>>27322
stop that scootaloo
I know what you're trying to do...
dont get that mischievous grin...
stop it.
>> No. 27358
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27358
>>27327
*scootaloo* NO!
>> No. 27359
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27359
some AJ :3
>> No. 27360
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>> No. 27361
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27361
i love this outfit :3
>> No. 27363
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27363
Oh my stars an' GARTERS. DANG.
I'm not sure I ever saw pony cooch done in such a poni style. Time to hunt down th' artist (and to make notes)
>> No. 27364
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27364
last one for today. it's freakin adorable.
>> No. 27365
>>27363
http://e621.net/post?tags=syoee_b

might help :D
>> No. 27391
>>27390
Uhm... is she... bruised up? Or is it the lighting? Yeah, okay... I guess?
>> No. 27392
>>27391
He is raping her actually.
>> No. 27393
>>27390
Raping her gently
>> No. 27399
>>27392
>>27393
DEAR GOD WHAT?! I didn't know that! Holy shit, is there a way to delete post? I mean, I guess I should look more closely before posting, but I... I'm sorry.
>> No. 27402
File 133282083346-to_delete.png - (53.96KB , 1024x768 , to delete.png )
27402
>>27399
yeah, i was gonna say something but -______-

if you used a password, click the check box in the top left corner of your comment and hit delete in the bottom right corner of your screen. otherwise, idk. :/
>> No. 27403
>>27402
It's gone now. Thanks.
>> No. 27405
>>27403
Just be sure to *check*, okay? We don't want that shit here.
>> No. 27407
I understand there's a bit of a difference, but I'm still a touch amused by everyone in this thread panicking over a picture of rape when the main draw of this thread is stories of rape. Statuatory rape, but rape nonetheless.
>> No. 27408
>>27407
Cutie Mark Crusader Hypocrites yay!
>> No. 27410
>>27407
*rolls eyes*
Geez, some people...
>> No. 27412
>>27407
I think your confused. There's a clear difference between the stories and that picture.
>> No. 27415
>>27407
2 anons does not make everyone.

With that said, I rather prefer the terms "corruption of a minor", "carnal knowledge of a minor", or "unlawful carnal knowledge", instead of "statutory rape", on the fact that they sound WAY boss. As for RFD and the CMC, unless any of them have actually reached puberty, it'd be more accurate to call RFD's relations with them by the generic term "child molestation".
Also, they're cartoon ponies.
>> No. 27416
>>27415
You know, if Scootaloo never mentioned what school she goes to, from the description alone, I would of believed they were in the late teens. I mean, how else could he 69 Scoots? But, at least there's genuine affection between them. Well, you know what I mean.
>> No. 27417
>>27416
He wouldn't be a foaliphile, then. On the notion of practicality, her body looks long enough (approximately RFD's torso) for it to be possible to 69 without much discomfort. Also, DAT NECK
http://ponibooru.413chan.net/post/view/128695
>> No. 27418
>>27417
Well, yeah, but a fully grown mare is like, what, 4 feet tall? And a filly is half of that? I just guess either the guy's short or everpony is tall... but in Twi and Me, Twilight is described to have the same proportions as Scoots. I guess the CMC hit a massive growth spur.
>> No. 27419
>>27415
> semantics
>> No. 27420
>but in Twi and Me, Twilight is described to have the same proportions as Scoots
That's a different universe than Foalin' Around & Filly foolin'! Most obvious is RFD's relationship with Twilight vis-a-vis whether he "tapped it" or not.
(BTW, outside of Twi and Me he did not, in fact, tap it)


>>27419
semen + antics
>> No. 27421
so, where the fuck is that next fic?
>> No. 27422
>>27421
In the wonderful world of the heat death of the universe.

Now shut up and wait.
>> No. 27423
File 133291123306-1298759806049.jpg - (18.23KB , 480x361 , 1298759806049.jpg )
27423
rape, arguing, talking down to anon, and hypothetical universes that differ only in proportions and whether or not RFD did twilight or not.

seems like you guys are getting agitated. O.O
shall i post more pics to sooth you?
>> No. 27427
>>27423
>whether or not RFD did twilight or not.
I know he didn't, I was just... forget it. Just post some pictures please.
>> No. 27429
>>24524
That. That's how I imagine she looks like in these stories. I kinda like it. I guess fillies have a radical growth spur. I mean, you never see the in between, just fillies, then mares.
>> No. 27433
>>27429
Agreed. Her grin is infectious!

Also, I has sad that nobody likes Snips and Snails. Derpy is an idiot, but she's liked. Well, I very much expect the next episode to make them even more hated. Purely for existing.
>> No. 27437
File 133298020834-start_licking.jpg - (51.76KB , 718x511 , start licking.jpg )
27437
>>27427
ok :3
>>27433
>Derpy is an idiot
i will light you on fire... ಠ_ಠ
>> No. 27438
File 133298025849-vag.png - (160.79KB , 1200x900 , vag.png )
27438
>> No. 27439
File 133298032393-socks.jpg - (149.29KB , 2000x2000 , socks.jpg )
27439
>> No. 27440
File 133298045797-cum.jpg - (59.31KB , 950x758 , cum.jpg )
27440
>> No. 27441
File 133298057807-469934_1734039694383.jpg - (117.15KB , 1459x1114 , 469934_173403969438388_100003063594281_235509_1583.jpg )
27441
dat anatomically correct boobage
>> No. 27442
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27442
>> No. 27443
File 133298081467-derpy_dance_up_seizu.gif - (93.63KB , 180x199 , derpy dance up seizure.gif )
27443
freakin sexy.
>> No. 27444
>>27443
THE SEXIEST THING EVER!
>> No. 27446
>>27444
*clop clop clop* ikr?
>> No. 27451
File 133308095770-813160_-_Friendship_.jpg - (352.99KB , 800x1280 , 813160 - Friendship_is_magic My_Little_Pony sweeti.jpg )
27451
This is relevant to the interests of this thread.
>> No. 27452
>>27443
I would like to perform missionary for the purposes of procreation with this pony
>> No. 27458
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27458
>>27452
>> No. 27494
File 133342825770.jpg - (28.88KB , 800x600 , Spoiler Picture.jpg )
27494
>>27451
yes it is :3
>> No. 27499
File 133350416871-149204_-_anon_artist.png - (266.06KB , 1133x1200 , 149204 - anon artist Tex my_neighbor_the_anon paro.png )
27499
Here they are, RFD and Scoot's, waiting for the rain to let up so they can finish repairing the club house (not really. Man that guy looks intense. He needs to lighten up).

Even though he should be smaller and she should be a little taller. But whatever.

Someone needs to draw art for these stories. And it should fit the proportions as they were described in these stories. I would, but I can't draw a straight line with a ruler.
>> No. 27500
File 133350437024-161017_-_)rape_artis.png - (324.49KB , 790x897 , 161017 - )rape artist Tex edit.png )
27500
>>27499
There's a reason why he doesn't smile.

"I'M SOO HAPPY!"
"Uh, you're creeping Rarity out, dude."
>> No. 27501
File 133350483676-130496_-_anon_artist.png - (300.94KB , 1500x886 , 130496 - anon artist Tex human sandwich twilight_s.png )
27501
>>27499
Nah, he seems more like the guy from 'Twi and me,' and I based this on nothing at all. That guy needs to smile more->>27500
HOLY SHIT NEVER MIND!
>> No. 27502
File 133350497111-120439_-_anon_artist.png - (58.17KB , 994x1017 , 120439 - anon artist Tex fluffy fluffy_pony fluffy.png )
27502
>>27501
Now, Twi's a hat.
>> No. 27503
File 133350503525-74427_-_artist_Egoph.png - (162.72KB , 852x848 , 74427 - artist Egophiliac derpy_hooves human she&#.png )
27503
>>27502
No, Derpy is best hat.

(Why are they all so small?)
>> No. 27504
>>27503
my LITTLE pony.....
>> No. 27505
File 133350975162-111246_-_artist_Tex_.png - (47.56KB , 818x881 , 111246 - artist Tex my_little_human nerd socks twi.png )
27505
>>27504
Not THAT little.

The picture has nothing to do with anything. It just adorable.
>> No. 27509
Socks... and sandals...
>> No. 27510
>>27499
He looks like a slightly less buff Kenshiro.
>Omae wa mo poni
>> No. 27519
>>27509
She *is* a nerd.
>> No. 27537
File 133365534889-161058_-_artist_The_.png - (181.42KB , 798x678 , 161058 - artist The_Weaver belly belly_rub book co.png )
27537
>>27505
Belly rub attack!

Not sure why his hands are green.
>> No. 27538
File 133365564694-160178_-_artist_pluc.png - (270.84KB , 720x720 , 160178 - artist pluckyninja comparison height_char.png )
27538
>>24524
This is what I imagine the size differences in the "Twi and Me" story. It's odd that the CMC are given the same proportions, but I really like it. It makes it seem that the CMC had a massive growth spur. I mean, you barely see a in between pony, just a mare or a filly in the show.
>> No. 27541
>>27537
Because that's Anonymous.
>> No. 27550
File 133368958112-we_will_never_stop_t.png - (272.56KB , 900x719 , we_will_never_stop_the_journey_by_feyrah-d4bsy6d.png )
27550
I really like how this author describes his character. Whenever he does, I imagine them looking like the picture here (minus the cutie marks, of course), but still having a certain innocence to them. And having them have actual affection towards RFD (and him giving it back) is really sweet, I think. It would be cool if it turns out polygamy is possible in Hotsauce version of equestria (they are herd type of animals, even though it would never make sense in the show) and he could be the 'stallion' of the CMC. Wait, that's kinda weird, isn't it?

...

Look, here are three little ponies,
Ready to sing for this crowd!
Listen up, cause here's our story,
I'm gonna sing it very loud!

When you're a younger pony,
And your flank is very bare,
Feels like the sun will never come,
When your cutie mark's not there.

So the three of us fight the fight!
There is nothing that we fear!
We'll have to figure out what we'll do next,
Till our cutie marks are here!

We are the Cutie Mark Crusaders,
On a quest to find out who we are.
And we will never stop the journey,
Not until we have our cutie marks!

They all say that you'll get your mark,
When the time is really right.
And you know just what you're supposed to do,
And your talent comes to light.

But it's not as easy as it sounds.
And that waiting's hard to do.
So we test our talents everywhere,
Until our face is blue!

We are the Cutie Mark Crusaders,
On a quest to find out who we are,
And we will never stop the journey,
Not until we have our cutie marks!

...

Sorry.
>> No. 27589
File 133375833075-part_2_by_kloudmutt-.png - (485.27KB , 900x771 , part_2_by_kloudmutt-d4vcrzr.png )
27589
I doubt this would ever happened in these stories, but I guess these could be three different occurrences instead of all at one, or whatever.
>> No. 27591
File 133375939992-Scootaloo_14.png - (240.58KB , 1033x898 , Scootaloo 14.png )
27591
>>27589
scootaloo in leather colar and make up. O.O


*JIZZ*
>> No. 27605
File 133378291901-sdsds.gif - (231.91KB , 353x393 , sdsds.gif )
27605
>>27589
>> No. 27610
>>27589

I'm having a hard time deciding which one is best.
>> No. 27611
>>27610
why choose?
>> No. 27612
I think Hotsauce might have some decent competition on the whole 'human on pony action' type story: [url]http://clopfic.heroku.com/fics/911[/url]
Well, maybe not a competition, but that's still a really awesome story.
>> No. 27619
>>27612
That was awesome.
>> No. 27620
>>27612
WOW, six chapters! I read this long ago and i thought there wouldn't be more than just the first two. I'm glad.
>> No. 27638
>>27611

You're right!

>>27612


Not bad. Though I was more interested in the cultural differences than the sex.
>> No. 27679
File 133399269151-too_much_for_them_by.png - (447.08KB , 900x771 , too_much_for_them_by_kloudmutt-d4vn05t.png )
27679
>>27589
Funny who it ended up being a game of twister.

>>27612
Now *that's* what I'm talking about! When you have readers care about the story just as much (or even more so) then the excellently written sex scenes, you know you're awesome. This is definitely one of the better clop fics out there (and I don't even like human on pony that much, but Hotsause and this AnonAuthor might change my mind). I'm so sick of "grim-dark" and "epic" fanfics (weird, since I used to find them intriguing).
>> No. 27689
>>27679

I think I know where you're coming from. I like me some epic adventure at times, but at some point you're likely to have an overdose, and kinda stop caring about the "world shattering disaster" of the week. So, time to take a step back and recharge the "campaign" batteries. The same with Grimdark. There's a reason why most of my buddies can only read so much of 40k fluff (which coined the phrase) without either rolling their eyes or burst their sides laughing.

Also, epic adventures tend to go on forever. Waiting for them to finally get on with it can be tiresome.
>> No. 27694
>>27689
Tell me about it. Don't get me wrong, I do have a very broad taste, but it seems that a lot of "epic" stories are just melodramatic anime wannabe's (and take forever to get anywhere), and the grim-dark crap just makes me roll my eyes now.

I mean, we've seen just how strong these ponies are (pulling a house, surviving a piano being dropped with only little cuts and bruises, healing super fast, smashing a whole barn, then ramming it so hard it explodes, getting hit by lightning is a minor inconvenience, etc.) so I can never take those seriously. They all seemed forced, and they're always overly gore-ish or talkative.

There are so many ways to make a legitimacy scary grim-dark story that fit's in the FiM universe, but no one seems to want to try. I mean, I've read scarier creepy pastas, and the really good ones don't have a drop of blood in them. I mean, I did *not* see the ending to 'candle cove' coming (admittedly, it's not more creepy than scary).
>> No. 27753
>>27612
Wow, read that a while ago but...now that I'm caught up...I'm ticked off that there isn't more!
>> No. 27756
>>27753
It's certainly leagues ahead of most of the "stories" here. The emotion between those two seem genuine, and it's written in a way that makes you care about the lore and background of Equestria along with the excellently written clop scenes (not only do they use the whole "wing boner angle, but it has a purpose, and the way it's described makes it seem more of a love act instead of a clop, if that makes sense) that seem just *part* of the great tale, and not the *point*, which to me makes it awesome.

Some so called "porn with plot" shit stories here could learn a thing or two from that fanfic. Calling it a clop almost seems insulting. It's a story with love scenes in it. There's a *big* difference. It tries something a little new and combines tropes and mixes it together so well(except that heat scene at the end. That seem contrived to me. But, it was handled very well, and from I can tell, a heat that hard only happens when you *really* love your other).

All the scenes have a purpose. Not only do we get to know the characters, but the cultural difference of Equestria. Hard to believe that this is human on pony action. I usually don't like those (because it's usually a whiny self-insert. In this story, you can't help but like the guy.) but this pulled it off for me. I didn't 'clop' once throughout the whole fic, I was actually too busy reading it (I don't usually clop while reading anyway. I always finish reading, and I barely think of the clop while... clopping. Is anyone else sick of using that word?).
>> No. 27759
>>27756
Yes and no. It's certainly one of the better ones. On the other hand, stories often get ragged on because they don't conform to "normal" sex.
Take "Preggity". That's a wonderful story, if you can see beyond the "weird" fetishes. The sex (you could call it lovemaking) is as much part of the whole as with "Xenophilia". But, since it does contain fetishes that aren't mainstream, posters will attack it. And honestly, disliking a story for subjective reasons is fine; Some poeple though are unable or unwilling to see that their reasons just might be exactly that- subjective.
>> No. 27765
>>27759
Yeah, I guess. It's odd, though. I don't have *any* of the fetishes in "Preggity," but *I* still liked it. They were just open to try different things. I guess people didn't like Rarity swelling up because she over ate. Whatever. At least that fic tells you what the fetish that's being featured. And I liked how much the anon and Rarity were in love, able to tolerate and even like each others fetishes. And they're kid was adorable(the delivery scene was gross, but it was very dramatic).
>> No. 27766
>>27759
I don't know. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/8650/Preggity Most people who read it seemed to like it. And I agree with what you and >>27765 said.
>> No. 27788
>>27765
I'm at chap 10, and at first I was pretty ok with anon being super cool about Rarity's large state, even going so far as indulging in some kinkiness involving food. But now that it's acknowledged that he has an expansion kink...I dunno...all the wuv I can handle, but the dude wants to keep Rarity huge after she gives birth? Hmmm...not my cup of tea...I'm finding it a bit more of a drag to read on as it's revealed how into his fetish he really is...
>> No. 27790
>>27788
Yeah, that *was* a little weird. Have you read Xenophillia yet? http://clopfic.heroku.com/fics/911 It's definitely up there. I think, anyway. You know, I kinda wish TimeBomb, Cowly, and GentlemanCreeper had their own thread here. It would really show most of these "writers" up. But I think their 2nd person style is kinda wasted. I mean, they give "us" a back story, appearance, and even dialog. Whatever. Why am I talking about them?
>> No. 27795
>>27790

Yeah, I'm both >>27753 and >>27788
>> No. 27805
File 133454250035-tumblr_m2jveukpW91r8.jpg - (246.05KB , 762x600 , tumblr_m2jveukpW91r8npgb.jpg )
27805
Exalius drew fan art of Filly Foolin' 2!
http://exalius.tumblr.com/post/21188918192/filly-fooling-thing-that-hotsauce-author-sure
>> No. 27806
>>27805
Let me just say this...

AAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!

Jesus Christ, that HORRIFYING!!
>> No. 27807
Have you guys read this fic involving Sweetie Belle, Scootaloo and human OC? I think its pretty good.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1z1nFzu9EREiUV50UGMQJrfPDGhWIBwCipauKDGWnwy4/edit#
>> No. 27811
>>27807
It's certainly relevant to this thread. The author claims to have been inspired by you, Hotsauce, and that he'd be happy if his fic measured even halfway up to yours.

The major difference (apart from it being second person) is the personality of the human in this scenario. He's not exactly the most likeable guy. It should be noted though that he wasn't supposed to be in the first place.

Maybe you should give it a read and tell us what you think. I imagine he (the author) would like to read your personal feedback.
>> No. 27816
>>27807
Read the reviews here for that: http://clopfic.heroku.com/fics/981

My favorite one is:
"Can someone explain to me why designing protagonist that you're supposed to dislike and be unable to relate to... makes sense?

Same thing with being about to screw foals, supposedly being quiet about that, but then walking around with a huge bag o' condoms.

And you can go on.

Of course, I understand making shameless clop material, but compare and contrast this with Hotsauce's stuff.

[ Note that I'm not accusing you of being a 'thief' or whatever. I find those arguments silly. Fanfiction involves recycling of ideas by design. And it's not like basically everyone hasn't read Hotsauce, given the talent. ]

In Hotsauce's world, you have a human that's very relatible and is a relatively nice person. He happens to be put in a situation with the CMC, which he likes but gets kind of run ragged by, that ends up being naughty. He has a thought process where he wonders what he should do and if he can get caught. He has sex in a really erotic way that's passionate where one can put their minds into the protagonist. There's an ending that makes sense given the situation that isn't a "teaser" or "gotcha" ending.

It's shameless clop material, but it works for very well. Unlike this."
>> No. 27819
>>27816

I have to say, I don't get the first line of that review. Of course it makes sense to create a protagonist one isn't supposed to like, or relate to. Eric Cartman is at least a co-protagonist, and a horrible human being to boot. "Protagonist" isn't the same as "hero".

This wasn't directed at you personally, anon; If I came across as attacking you, I apologise.
>> No. 27822
>>27819
You should post that comment at the source: http://clopfic.heroku.com/fics/981

I don't know, it's kinda weird for the guy that's suppose to be "me" to be so much of a douche bag. But, whatever.
>> No. 27823
>>27822
Well, yes- in a second person perspective it can be jarring, give you that.
>> No. 27829
>>27823
Protagonists can certainly be horrible people, but since the audience is intended to empathize with the protagonist, having one that is more than a bit of a douche can be unsettling. To use your own example Cartman is often an unrelatable character, rather than being set up as a protagonist, he is often set up as the antagonist of the episodes set against what the other boys are doing. Keep in mind Protagonist denotes the character that the audience is intended to identify with, and whom is in conflict with the antagonist. You're supposed to *like* the protagonist so that you get emotionally invested in their success against the antagonist.

Having a main character that is unrelatable sets many readers on edge, and having it be in a 2nd person story simply makes it worse. Stories told in the 2nd person often leave motivations and feelings out of the story for this exact reason. When faced with a 2nd person perspective, readers fill in the blanks with their own thoughts, their own feelings, and often even their own motivations. Anything stated that "you do", or "you think", etc. that goes against the readers own thoughts and motivations feels alien and fundamentally wrong because it's not what *you* would actually do.

>>27612
With that out of the way "Xenophilia" is easily one of my favorite stories out right now, clop or non, but I don't want to rave about it too much here since this is Hotsauce's thread, but everypony that loves a good story to go along with their clop should check it out. The author has about the same update speed as hotsauce so fans can feel right at home :P
>> No. 27837
File 133463040489-167966_-_apple_bloom.png - (341.98KB , 1000x983 , 167966 - apple_bloom artist kumkrum cmc Cutie_Mark.png )
27837
I think this picture fits with Foalin' Around quite nicely. Since Iron Will is a minotaur (and their seven feet tall) these dimensions fit the descriptions nicely, like the CMC hit puberty or something.
>> No. 27848
>>27837
I'm ok with this
>> No. 27854
Hmm, out of curiosity, how come people seem to think the CMC in Foalin' Around have hit puberty.
I mean... the story and descriptions do NOT lead me to believe that, haha.
>> No. 27858
>>27854
They're in denial. Drowning and wallowing in a river of rejection of their own selves. Unwilling to pull themselves onto the shore and look upon the water's surface to see their reflections out of fear that accepting the truth will push them past their self-imposed taboos.

Even though they enjoy Hotsauce's fics from behind the masks of their anonymous online personas, subconsciously they retain the need to adhere to a morality long discarded, layer by layer, as they found appreciation of his works. Like that of a phantom limb, nerves long lost but still connected by principle of the brain's own volition against the truth, these people see our solid ground as polluted. Toxic.

The waters where they tread represent their need to be clean. To let the buoyant forces carry the weight of guilty enjoyment from what they've read in Filly foolin'! and Foalin' Around and Snapshots off their shoulders lest they submit to that terrible reality held in so much contempt.

Only they can grasp our outstretched hands to pull them ashore, welcomed by those of us who have come to accept what they continue to deny. They can speak of their rights of personal interpretation as much as they can search in vain for the bottom of that river, to stand and not feel haggard worry of dirtying themselves. I will stand ever present, a sentinel at the ready, to pull up my brothers (and sisters?) who struggle still and say "Let's wait for Hotsauce to update together."


tl;dr
They're a bunch of pussies, but I'm not gonna tell them to stop lovin' Hotsauce. Wonder when he'll update.
>> No. 27860
>>27854
"I realised that they’d grown longer since I’d first arrived in Equestria and had developed into that adolescent lankiness I find so absolutely adorable."

Quoted from Foalin' Around: Electric Scootaloo

Please note that that's a guess on my part.
>> No. 27861
>>27860
The item in question are Scootaloo's legs. I cut that part mistakenly; my bad.
>> No. 27867
>>27861
Interesting find, Starswirl
>> No. 27869
>>27858
What are you, a Persona character? Get over yourself.

If the Cuties Mark Crusader's are described the exact same as Twilight and Luna, then it would makes sense that they're bigger. It's even stated by RFD that Scootaloo is bigger. And how could Apple Bloom lie flat on the guy's stomach and feel something pocking her chest when her "rump" (as the fic innocently calls is) is rammed into the guy's face? Have you seen how tiny the CMC are in the show? And a human is only slightly shorter than Iron Will. It stands to reason that they're just a bit older than in the show. I honestly don't care about that, but that's were people are coming from.

Try not to copy and paste a quote from a video game next time.
>> No. 27871
>>27869
> Sees the word persona
> Immediately thinks of the videogames
>> No. 27872
>>27869
I wish I played Persona so I knew what was going on...
>> No. 27873
>>27871
That's because it is.

>>27872
The guy that was being replied to tried to sound smart by posting a quote from one of the games, and the other guy explained how the CMC did hit puberty (or had a growth spur). I mean, even in the clop it states the the CMC are bigger, especially Scoots. I don't see how anyone missed that.
>> No. 27874
File 133471677447-167806_-_adult_apple.jpg - (245.23KB , 1200x850 , 167806 - adult apple_bloom artist KP-ShadowSquirre.jpg )
27874
>>27872
You could go to a Let's Play. Here's one for Persona 4 I like: http://lparchive.org/Persona-4/
Here's 2 and 3, just in case: http://lparchive.org/Persona-2-Eternal-Punishment/ http://lparchive.org/Persona-3/

Oh, and I added a CMC picture to make this relevant.
>> No. 27890
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>>27874
Still waiting... did Hotsauce die? Is he busy with *real* life?
>> No. 27891
>>27874
Sorry to go offtopic, but I would recommend the Persona 4 Endurance Run as my favorite LP of all time.
http://www.giantbomb.com/shin-megami-tensei-persona-4/61-21373/videos/
>> No. 27892
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>>27890
The water is now semen
>> No. 27896
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27896
This picture is relevant, I guess. Has anyone hear from Hotsauce at all? I mean, it's kinda weird that he hasn't been on here in a while. That dude needs a tumblr or something.

>>27837
Hey, they look kinda cute, there.
>> No. 27905
>>27896
I, uh...I ....

wow
>> No. 27907
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>>27896
I kinda miss the guy. Most of these bumps are mostly just people trying to keep this thread alive. It would be nice if he were to say *something*.
>> No. 27909
One does not simply *miss* hotsauce. He is above the cares of mere mortals. He resides in his palace built upon the broken dreams and anguished cries of bronies. Every few months he comes down to deliver the word of our Lord Hotsauce to the masses and we swoon, drifting along on the imaginings of his gifted prose.

Then he climbs the thousand steps of shattered consciousness back to his retreat as our cries fall upon his deaf ears, our praise making his feet light even as his heart sinks knowing it shall be many more months before he again visits his fans. The adulation we heap passes over him, enveloping him like a favorite blanket and sustaining his life force for another while.

The towers of his castle hover above him, his footsteps echoing off the barren walls as he makes his slow way to his chambers. A comfortable bed, the only adornment in an otherwise empty room. Hotsauce curls up clutching a large perfectly clean, white pillow in his arms. A ghostly presence of ponies fills the room brightening the drab walls as the lithe figures of a small alicorn & three foals nestle down around him, filling the bed with their presence as hotsauce slumbers, waiting until that day when inspiration shines again and he will once more walk down the hillside to deliver onto us another "Snapshots" or "Foalin' Around" story.

Until that day, he waits, nestled among the comforting thoughts. Our cries for more can not reach him. Our desire for his work can not sway his heart. Until that day, we wait as well. Our pain at the lack of his divinity slowly fading to the background until we barely remember what it is we're missing, only knowing there is something gone, something important that is no longer there. Until that day, when our hearts beat again, filled to bursting with his joyous return.
>> No. 27911
>>27909
Oh god, his fans have become so deprived of new material they've become delusional!

There's nothing we can do. Sleep, dear princes, sleep. Soon, this thread shall sage and sink as all must do, and you will find blissful silence.
>> No. 27912
>>27909
His name is apt, and calls to mind what his works do to his lowly fans. The masses are dwindled to only those whom seek the spice, the heat that causes their loins to burn and to cry tears...from their genitals...

The End
>> No. 27946
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27946
>>27896
>>27907
>>27837

Just bored. Waiting for >>27909
Well. Never mind then.
>> No. 28051
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28051
Not really on the same level as Hotsauces descriptions, AJ's accent isn't written in, and it's a little fast in the beginning, but the main character seems nice. It's not bad.
>> No. 28056
>>28051
So this thread's become a fic and pic dumping ground unrelated to the OP, then?

Guys, just let it die already. If he comes back, he'll come back.
>> No. 28057
>>28056
But... but maybe, he'll see we still care (sniff) and he'll tell us how he's doing and... (begins to openly weep) I miss him so much! He was such a nice guy! He was one of the few clop fic writers that didn't take this seriously and knew how silly this was, but still put decent effort in his clops... why did he have to go?! He was so young! (continues to weep)

But seriously, that dude needs a tumblr or something.
>> No. 28061
>>28056
We have to stay strong and finish the fic!
>> No. 28072
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28072
this is relevant.

http://ponibooru.413chan.net/post/list/artist%3Atojyo/1

It's a bit disjointed, but... actually, it's really silly. At least the arts good? I don't know.

What am I even doing? Is Hotsauce ever coming back?

This has become a repository instead of a thread. Maybe, I should just wait...

I just...
>> No. 28075
>>28072
I wish the human would use his hands and tongue. Just penetrations good for a doujinshi, but... I don't know. It did seem like we caught them in the middle, so who knows what they did before. And did she cum? I don't know, I don't like it when the female isn't satisfied in these things.

And the dialog is kinda laughable. I don't know if that was intentional, but it was kinda silly.
>> No. 28114
>>28072
Thanks, I needed a laugh. The art is good, but the dialog is really special. I can't read it, but at the link, someone translated it in the comments, and it's hilarious. It's almost every cliche you can think of. I'm surprised he didn't say "My hips are moving on their own!" That one is always funny. Who says that?
>> No. 28168
I've been away for so long because last time I came on I saw the fanart Exalius did for Foalin' Around and I had a brain-aneurism at its pure awesomeness.

But I'm back with the (I hope) good news that the next part of Snapshots will be out in about a week, and that you can expect Wall-eyed Angel after that. Thank you all for your comments and, most of all, patience. I'll drop back in to answer some questions I read higher up the thread soon.
>> No. 28171
>>28168

You were suppose to rise again on the 3rd day! Dude, I thought time dilation was below you.

Welcome back!
>> No. 28172
>>28168
Thank god for more Snapshots. Besides your Celestia series (has that been officially concluded?) Snapshots is your best series yet.
I'm looking forward to it.
>> No. 28176
>>28168
Snapshots snapshots snapshots yes.

Is Snapshots just gonna be a 2 parter, or is there more loli Luna waiting for us after this?
>> No. 28181
My wonderful rendition of his life >>27909 has spontaneously summoned up the man himself :) I realize it's 10 days later but that's near instantaneous in hotsauce's time-frame.

Good to see you back, and I'm looking forward to the next snapshats (and many more in the long distant future XD).
>> No. 28202
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>>28168
>Snapshots will be out in about a week
ETA: next month

xD jk Hotsauce. i kid because i love. can't wait though :3
>> No. 28212
>>28181
That was some awesome prose! It's also surprisingly accurate, except for the lack of cigarette-butt filled glasses everywhere.

>>28176
There will be a few more after this one. I enjoy being able to describe humans rather than ponies - it's like a holiday from my foal stuff. I'll probably pack my human-Luna off to another, more serious story in the future - I enjoy writing her a lot.


>>28202
lol, yeah - I know I write slow. But I've actually almost finished it. It's up to 8000 words at the moment and will be finished with around 500 more. I'm quite happy with this one.

Wall-eyed Angel is also kicking along well. Derpy has had a bad trime of late.
>> No. 28331
>>28212
One week ago, you said Snapshots was about a week away. Soooooooo...

(Much love to you, hotsauce. And even if it turns out you underestimated, still much love to you. I'm just antsy for more Luna.)
>> No. 28333
Did Hotsauce ever do something involving Twist?

There's a nice story here: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/4912

It reminded me of lot of his work.
>> No. 28334
>>28333
Did you read the one involving Silver Spoon in "Spoon"? It's pretty good to me.
>> No. 28354
>>28334
Oh yeah, that guy's Spoon-story is freaking great. It's at: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/22572/Spoon
>> No. 28357
Snapshots from the Ruins of My Mind II

human x loli Luna

http://pastebin.com/6K0ZmGMN
>> No. 28360
>>28357
HORY SHEET
>> No. 28364
Aww yea, Hotsauce never lets us down. Who's gonna make the new thread?
>> No. 28367
>>28357
AWWW YEAHH!!!
>> No. 28381
>>28357

I think i see where this is going now.

Its either Celestia or Luna or even maybe a small chance that Cadence, is the therapist
>> No. 28383
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>>28381
sometimes a therapist is just a therapist
>> No. 28415
I honestly don't know why you bother with the CMC when you put out gems like your latest Luna story hotsauce. I swear, one of these days you're going to tell us that it's just a pen name shared with a couple buddies.
Anyways, some minor stuff that could use correcting if you do a second draft:
She caught me looking at her – the whole display had, of course, been intentional, and she frowned, quickly pulling the hem back down. You should have a second hyphen to section off the thought of it being intentional.
Like before, Luna was playing with me, knowing full well that if someone caught her at her antics it would be me who suffer Tense. Suffered.
“Last time we met, I was pretty mean towards you, wasn’t I? You'd probably benefit more from "to you" than "towards you".
I did my best to keep it together as I leaned over her body and grabbed the blanked from where I’d stashed it beneath the seat in front of me. Blanket, you have a typo.
As soon as those tiny lips with their perfect cupid’s-bow pressed down on my dick through my underwear, I knew I couldn’t stop her – and I didn’t want to anymore. Her tongue and lips were hot and moist as she kissed her way along the length and I gritted my teeth at the exquisiteness of the sensation Consistency. You used "grit" in the past tense previously, but "gritted" here.
“Are you really that excited, daddy? There’s stuff coming out of dick already!” Missing a "your" to denote ownership of said penis.
>> No. 28417
>baby-blowjob
You motherfucker.

My fingers were feather-light as I drew them up her leg and brushed the spot behind her knee. Knees plural.
It didn’t take too long – Luna was obviously powerfully turned on, and her little pussy kept squeezed at my finger as if trying to suck it inside. Squeezing, not squeezed.
She was still pumping it with her hands, but she knew what I wanted and let the head forced its way past her lips. Force. Present tense.
“But you said you were going to do either,” It'd probably sound smoother if you said "either or", or else linked up the next bit of text without using a full stop.
I was feeling pretty tired to "Too".
“I’m just looking Selena,” I said. "looking for Selena".

And that's pretty much it. Again, head and shoulders above some of your other stuff, not that I want to slam that too hard. You've done well in the past, and I can only guess that your style and diction for the CMC fics is intentional. That is to say, you're one cold, calculating professional. Can't wait for more Luna and Celestia.
>> No. 28419
So guys, I take it Foalin' Around 3 isn't out yet? What's the story with it, I'm really looking forward to it.
>> No. 28421
>>28334
>>28354

.////. Thank you so much! My foal writing is definitely inspired by hotsauce.

>>28357
OMFG HOTSAUCE. God I loved this one.
The story is starting to build, and I'm excited :D
Plus DAMN... the 8-9yo Luna... nnh
Your regular writing is great, but when it comes to loli or foal, NO ONE writes it like you.

You could make a million more chapters for Snapshots and I'd read them all.
But I am INCREDIBLY excited for Derpy :)

Keep up the good work!
>> No. 28448
Still waiting for Foalin' Around 3. Sweetie Belle and Applebloom as best CMC's
>> No. 28449
I personally would like more romantic stuff with Sweetie Belle, she's too cute :3
>> No. 28460
Just wondering, is anyone else having the problem where they want to enjoy Snapshots but the voice in the back of their head screaming "What the fuck is wrong with yoy!?" makes it very difficult?
>> No. 28461
>>28460
That voice is your sanity, reminding you once again that lusting over a prepubescent child is fucked up. Listen to it, it shall be your salvation.
>> No. 28463
>>28461
Then you realize that sanity is overrated, because you never thought in a million years you'd be a fan of talking cartoon ponies before.
>> No. 28464
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>>28357
that was, by far, one of the best things i've ever read. truly amazing.

>>28460
no, i've never had that problem. what makes it hard for me to read is the mini pinkie pie in my head yelling "PUT YOUR DICK IN IT!!!"

>>28461
i disagree completely. :3
>> No. 28465
>>27451


Seriously, that is the cutest, most adorably sexy thing I've ever seen. I bet she would taste like heaven itself. Those amazingly squishy cheeks hiding probably the cutest little puckered anus ever. I can only imagine, the scent would be orgasmic.
>> No. 28467
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>>28460
>>28464

My inner voice
>> No. 28475
I'd like an update from the sauce man himself.
>> No. 28476
Another clopfic involving the CMC to keep your hands busy while waiting for the next update:

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/23673/All-Of-Your-Love
>> No. 28479
>>28476
A fic were "we" are forced to take the CMC's virginity's by Chrysalis... and it's labeled as Dark.

No thanks.
>> No. 28483
>>28476

Eh no thanks, I'd rather the CMC be willing and ultra horny. Sweetie Belle actually wanting it makes it SO much hotter. I don't even think raping Sweetie Belle would register a chubs, it would probably even make me feel uncomfortable.
>> No. 28487
>>28479
>>28483
It's only rated "Dark" because it involves the CMC, there's nothing really dark about the stories. The sex is rather vanilla (not necessarily bad in and of itself) and could use more "fleshing out" and better description, but other than that it's not too bad. Certainly not upto hotsauce's standards but if the CMC are what you're lusting for, it'll get you across the finish line.
>> No. 28494
>>28487
In that story, not only does the human become the changeling king, but the CMC *really* like what the human did and decide to stay when the human wakes up to see if they can try again. All four of them do that, in fact.
>> No. 28506
>>28357 Is there an ETA for Wall-eyed Angel any time soon? (Sorry, you probably get asked this kind of thing all the damn time, but it's been a long time since I saw a good Human x Derpy clopfic)
>> No. 28507
Can't wait for foalin 3

Oh god why are the CMC so cute, it shouldn't be allowed!
>> No. 28515
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28515
I know this is more of a CMC thread, but I still like "Twi and Me", so I found this piece of art.
>> No. 28516
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>>28515
This one kind of reminds me of "Twi and Me" also, but I don't get the punch line. Could someone shed some light my way here?
>> No. 28517
>>28516
The joke is that Twilight is only "acting" naive, of course she's not so introverted and clueless that she doesn't know basic anatomy (Biology at the very least would cover that even if she hadn't had any personal experience) but she knows that guys get a kick out of a woman acting like that.
RD's response is more of a, "Wow I can't believe he actually fell for that line." highlighting the absurdity of the situation.
>> No. 28518
>>28517
Makes sense, but the human in Weavers little thing doesn't like ponies like that, but whatever.
>> No. 28519
>>28518
I didn't realize this was an ongoing story/comic. The idea that the human in it doesn't like ponies in a sexual way might put RD's comment in a new light. Perhaps noting that if the ponies keep making sexual advances toward him he's just going to kill himself to avoid the continued advances... the lucky bastard :P
>> No. 28521
>>28518
Where can I find the rest of these comics?
>> No. 28522
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28522
Exalius said that this drawing was for hotsauce, too! :D
>> No. 28524
>>28521
Most (if not all) are at Ponibooru. You should do a search on "The Weaver" or something close to that. It's not really a series, just a bunch of jokes. Also, do a search on "human fetish". It might help, too.
>> No. 28533
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28533
i take all of the twilight R34 being posted as a challenge. i shall except your challenge... tomorrow. :3
>> No. 28602
GOing to bump as I am excited for Foalin around 3
>> No. 28632
Am I a bad person for wanting to see some nice Twist porn?

Fics and pics.

Fics where she just milks some lucky human guy, leaving her glasses all filmy and white, would be awesome.
>> No. 28655
Bumping again because got I love you hotsauce
>> No. 28701
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28701
>>28655
At least have something awesome to post, like maybe this picture?

I have no idea what's happening in that picture, but it's awesome, I tell you what.
>> No. 28709
Look at this: these people are insulting Hotsauce and us!

http://www.projectafterforums.com/index.php?showtopic=3202&st=0

I mean, those bastards are saying that we suck for enjoying Hotsauce's fics! Just because they have paedophilic overtones doesn't make them trash!
>> No. 28713
>>28709

Hehe... they're doin' me! :D

You know the best part? The guy doin' Trixie's Magic Bit is from Dildo, Newfoundland.

Who better, I ask you? XD

I'll give 'em a cookie if they can do it faster than I can write chapters...
>> No. 28715
>>28709
You're right, that's not the only reason they're trash. The fact that they're all terribly written is a major factor.
>> No. 28718
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>>28709
That's weird, from the descriptions, I always assumed that the CMC are about as big as an adult. I mean, how else can Apple Bloom accidentally sit on RFD's face, and she feels "something" hitting her chest, or when RFD is commenting on how much Scootaloo has grown? I always just thought that they hit a massive growth spur. (really, you kind of could replace AB with AJ, or STL with RD, and only change about 5% of the dialog. I'm not saying it's a bad thing, either)

Here's an cute picture of the CMC to forget. I don't know, I kinda like how the CMC and RFD like each other (the human might of had "plans," but he genuinely cares about the CMC and doesn't want to get in trouble, although from the way the CMC (and other foals, for that matter) act around the RDF, I think he's over reacting.

Don't worry, that's just a riff. It's completely harmless.

>>28713
I read some of your stuff. Yeah, if anything, these fics here and yours are *very* easily riffed on, but *especially* yours. I'm not saying hotsauce is better, but at least he doesn't put me to sleep and pisses me off when I read his stuff, but to each their own.
>> No. 28719
>>28715
Like every clop fic ever.

Please, gore and clop fics are easy target's for MST'ers, that's all. They're easy to make fun of.

Besides, I bet the clop fics you like aren't any better, and ripe for the riffing.
>> No. 28720
>>28709

>Don't you just love the logic bronies use for extra sex organs? "Hey dude, unicorns and pegasi use their wings and horns during sex for pleasure. Don't ask how that works, it's magic, bitch!"

Is it weird that I completely agree with this? I never got that. I mean, I know it started as a joke (wing boner!), but about a third of the clops out there think that's an actual thing, and it's getting very strenuous.

I don't know what people are complaining about, the riff is hilarious.
>> No. 28722
>>28709
All this work over a few internet fics is cute to see. Really, who'd be sane enough to read through fics they hate and/or despise on purpose, make witty insults and critiques using ad hominems rather than simply pointing out Hotsauce's writings on their own demerit? Sure he does that, but really anyone who's read Hotsauce on a regular (being very liberal with the term considering the dude's update schedule) basis should only shrug his shoulders and nod their head since it really isn't news at all.

Haha, I'm a fan of his twisted imaginings but I'm finding it even more entertaining how those guys on that other forum have started getting antsy at the thought of fanboys raiding them.

Oh, this whole thing is just MAGICAL

>>28720
Same here, dawg. I wanna meet the dudes on both sides who are taking this super seriously, haha.
>> No. 28723
>>28721
Look up MST 3000 (or Riff Tracks), this is basically a text version of that.

I don't see the big deal, people can make fun things they don't like. I mean, we're doing the same thing, letting a bunch of people get under our skins. Just let them have their fun, and let's just forget them.

When's Wall Eyed Angel coming out, HotSauce?

>>28713
I read your stuff. I wouldn't be surprised if a bunch of people riffed on your clops. Just saying.

Yes, I'm aware of the hypocrisy here.
>> No. 28724
>>28713
Is it weird that I completely agree with that mock of your story? Yeah, I already know what you're going to say, but let me preempt you; I'm aware of what I'm reading, and I know how to take a joke, I like these fics, but I also through the riff was hilarious on these stories.
>> No. 28725
>>28719
I mean they are actually rather terribly written from a technical aspect. Simplistic sentences and descriptions, very cliché progression of events and characterizations and bland self-inserts.

Anything can be riffed, it's not hard. Hotsause's stuff is just objectively bad, and that's not even going into the pedo aspects they imply. People defend him, sure, but they do that for Raging Semi, and he can't 'show' over 'tell' to save his life. They're invested in the fics already and are only interested in circlejerking.
>> No. 28726
>>28725
... You got me there. That's why I think most of these writers need something like WhiteSmoke to help them out.
>> No. 28727
>>28725
Remind me to never meet serious clopfic readers irl...j/k...no...seriously, though...
>> No. 28730
>>28727
Meh. A story's a story, no excuse not to write it well.
>> No. 28732
>>28722
They're getting antsy? Like, afraid of getting beat up by ponies? Dang.

And I love the way everybody seems to think "the gaaaay, Dashie, the gay!" wasn't supposed to be laughed at in the first place. I mean, OH COME ON! That's just straight up silly.

Folks seem to think they are expected to like everything, and that it's some grand stance to boldly hate on stuff. The internet is big. Get used to it.

One thing about it- and I'm perfectly serious- it is at least very effective in keeping down possible competition for the actual readers out there. Here is how:

It's always possible to zero in on the negative space of a thing and try to eradicate its faults or mock them. Things are MADE of faults defining their shape and form. The clearer the faults, the clearer the form, and the more specific the thing. When you operate totally defensively, your work becomes incredibly dry and guarded, because you're MSTing yourself all the time, heading off possible attacks.

The public never likes dry and guarded creative works. Ever. They just die the death. Faultless things suck.

I've got stuff I detest too, I am far from fond of 'My Little Dashie' over its ruthless manipulativeness and low demands of its audience- but I would never, ever imply that made it a 'bad fic' because to my mind it's fantastic at doing something I don't respect.

The quicker you give up on the idea that it's your job to avoid negative-space problems, and focus on defining the THING your fic is, the quicker you will get serious readership. Doesn't mean you're any more 'good', but reaching people is NOT that hard to do.

Whether you want to do it- sort of defines who you are. I don't give a crap who I offend, because I know who I'm writing for, and it's pretty much not the kids on that site, or anybody who feels like they've said a particularly momentous thing when they say they hate my stories. It's fine. Hope ya have something very different that you do like- for your sake. It would be terrible not to like anything :)
>> No. 28733
>>28732
Hey, careful now, your sensitivity about your magnum opus is showing. You really expect people outside of this fandom to take a futa story that goes on and on and on seriously?

>"the gaaaay, Dashie, the gay!"
You can't shoot in a joke like that right in the middle. It's like if a web comic artist just decided to write a character having a miscarriage, then quickly forget about it. Really, your fic is kinda decent, but you're *way* to defensive about it, and you need an editor *badly*. A lot of what the riffer said about the actual fic (the ones that weren't jokes) were spot on. Just accept that. It's OOC; the anatomy is screwed up, meanders is too kind of a word for that fic, and so on.

>creative works
Ha. This is just clop. Get over yourself. At least become self-aware that you're writing smut about pastel color ponies based on a little girls show growing dicks. I mean, that's what I did. I know this is stupid, and I don't take this seriously.

Way to take a quick poke at your story like it's an attack.
>> No. 28734
>>28730
A million times this.

Seriously, though, I wish HotSauce would be quick about his stories, or at least have a tumblr or something.
>> No. 28735
>>28733
I don't mind being sensitive. If you wanna give me a moment of lookin' like Edvard Mvnch's "The Scream" that I got compared unfavorably to Control-Alt-Delete, enjoy- that did give me chills, and I threw up a lil' in my mouth (nah- but I should've)

And I take it real seriously and am doing my level best, and don't mind admitting it. I've even upped my game a bit on the back of some internet critics- but not ones in the sense of that forum.

You're making attacks, and that is perfectly okay. Since I'm real unlikely to change to please you (for that matter, I am sure Hotsauce isn't going to change to please you guys either), I'd better just double down on the tolerating. Nothin's gonna make me love you, though. Why should I?
>> No. 28736
>>28735
>You're making attacks
*rolls eyes, tightly clenches eyes shut, then smacks his forehead with a harsh sigh*

Oh, whatever.

I guess no one can say anything about the stuff they don't like, otherwise, it's an attack.

Being a brick wall is the way to go, and we all should never express anything other than unbridled enthusiasm and praise, no matter if we have legitimate criticisms, or just want to entertain the people who are into MSTs, because only a block head would ever get offended by any of that.
>> No. 28737
>>28733
>web comic artist just decided to write a character having a miscarriage, then quickly forget about it.
You've just achieved critical mass with that comment, there. Essentially brought a M.I.R.V. to a fists-only street rumble.
>> No. 28738
>>28733
kk, since you're pretty late to the party, I wanna let you know that Jinx has already faced a lot of criticism and is doing his best to take it on board, even by now it's repetitive and frustrating. Forgive him if he's short with you, but he's heard it all before and he is working on it. Please don't talk down on him like he's Hotsause, and be consrtuctive with your arguments.

At it's core, TMB actually gives a shit about the characters - unlike most other clop - and that in my book putsit a cut above the rest even if the execution can leave something to be desired.
>> No. 28739
>>28738
Only on a Hotsauce thread can people anxiously wait for a writer's work while unflinchingly bashing it without remorse...
>> No. 28740
>>28739
Oh, believe me, I am not a fan of this guy's tripe.
>> No. 28743
>>28738
>TMB actually gives a shit about the characters - unlike most other clop - and that in my book putsit a cut above the rest

Are you from bizarro world? Where in the hell in that story made you think Jinx cared about the characters? He made Rainbow into fucking Ethan from Cad (everything RD does is okay, but when it's some pony else ALL HELL BRAKES LOSE).

Read >>28298 , >>28303 , and >>28234 posted on the Applejinx thread. Those pretty much sum it up. His stories are so artificial and full of character assassination it's almost laughable (not that these fics here aren't, but at least hotsauce knows that this is stupid), it's like reading a teenagers first stories after he watched some "adult" overemotional, hammy anime or something.
>> No. 28745
>>28743
Considering I wrote two of those posts you pointed to, I think I know where I stand on the issue. Especially since Jinx went on to take the criticism on board, altering his current fic to accommodate the critic's worries. He's actively trying to improve rather than dwell on past mistakes.

Jinx suffers from characterization problems and is overly fond of Dash, but no matter how crazed the story gets, it's first and foremost about the characters and working through the mistakes they make.

TMB a story, which is more than Hotsauce's wish-fulfilment, pedo self-insert fics can claim to be.
>> No. 28746
>>28743
seems pretty legit. i propose we ignore this substantial amount of evidence and proceed with enjoying the stagnation of creativity, WHEEEEEEE
>> No. 28747
>>28745
Every fanfic is wish-fulfillment no matter what.

This is basically "this fics fetish is worse than that one!" isn't it? They're both terrible authors, but one thinks he's writing a novel (delusional doesn't cover it), and the other doesn't really give a shit (nice of you to ignore hotsauce's fics that don't involve the CMC. They're not perfect, but there's no clop in existence that is).

Try to make more post with your name. It can be confusing.

>it's first and foremost about the characters and working through the mistakes they make.

You mean the mistakes Rainbow has made, since she's the cause of everything in that fic. If anything, she's the villain.

Maybe when Applejinx get's his head out of his ass and actually writes a story that's not OOC to hell (or not just a fetish piece clop. Those types of stories almost make it that you have to break the characters just to make way for something that stupid) doesn't try to talk like AJ like a creeper, and has a fucking crush on RD in real life; I might give him more credit.
>> No. 28748
>>28747
>Every fanfic is wish-fulfillment no matter what.
Eh, only in the broadest sense. When we call a story wish-fulfilment, we're really referring to the idea that the author (and the readers who praise it) wish to be the main character and live out all their private fantasies.

There's going to be an element of this in everything, there must be, but when the author panders to that aspect, their fic stops being able to be called a story. For all it's flaws, by aiming to tell a story and continually aiming to improve, TMB (or more relevantly the sequel, which is taking more criticisms on board because it's not to late to alter things) is leagues ahead of Hotsause's "nameless anon fucks a horse and/or a prepubescent child for your sake" fics.
>> No. 28749
>>28748
I thought the point of actual criticism was the execution of a fic, not the fetish behind it. I'm sure you read these fics, but it doesn't seem like it.

All of hotsauces fics are one shot's (well, mostly), and doesn't pretend to be anything more than clop, while Applejinx has delusions of grandeur with his magniloquent anecdotes. I'm sure if hotsauce wanted to write 20 chapters he would (he would take forever, though), and he wouldn't need something like a magic bit that makes you grow a dick (hey, that rhymed) to drive the plot forwards and make all the characters take DERP pills just for drama sake.

Its pretensions of Applejinx to think that his readers are nothing more than pea-brains, like every other clop fic reader (yes, I'm including myself), and at most an idiot would take it so seriously that he thinks he's writing a good drama novel that would only make it into a hentai at best.

At least, hotsauce breaks up the pace with the sex scenes (being humans, that easy). All Applejinx is "insert penis here, overly entangled explanation of the same thing you already read about 30 times before." His stories are boring when it comes to the actual clop scenes, and his characters behave so over the top and forceful it's aggravating.
>> No. 28750
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28750
>>28749
It's okay for you to not like AJ's work (I can't comment on it since I haven't read it), but *please* be Kind in your posts. It's inappropriate of you to call him an idiot; it's not as though you have to be cruel to give Honest criticism.
>> No. 28751
>>28749
It's not about fetish, it's about structure - execution is nothing if the underlying structure is flawed, and Hotsause's stuff is irredeemable in that sense. You say 'he's aware how stupid it is', but I've read stuff that was just as aware and still told a story that was about the characters, not Insert-Name-Here.

It's clear you believe Jinx has failed to tell his story well. I'm inclined to agree. But unlike Hotsause, he's actually tried. He used the fetish to explore ideas of gender roles, the clop is just another aspect of the story the characters use to explore interpersonal relationships. Say what you like about the execution and about the characterization, but at least it's there. At least Jinx is showing he wants to improve and is taking feedback. At least Jinx is trying to write a story. The fact that there's clop in it is only one aspect of it.

All Hotsause does is panders to his fetishes. His fics begin and end with them. They aren't stories.
>> No. 28752
>>28751
Some of you guys are prepared to say that, for instance, "Fallout: Equestria" is a terrible failure of a story, and that is where you lose me. If your interpretations of what is good so completely clash with what I've liked and ridiculous numbers of people have liked, I am really, really not comforted by the prospect of developing things to appeal to you better...

I can take apart Fallout: Equestria for you and tell you what WORKS in some detail. For some of you, you can tell me why it completely fails, and yet to me it doesn't, so there's a failure to communicate there.

Hell, Hotsauce's stuff works on some levels too. It's odd to me as that is not specifically my fetish, but it feels internally consistent and there's a peculiar benevolence that's creepy but also rather appealing. I'm a lot meaner than Hotsauce. He's probably a nicer person. I'm not sure if that translates into 'nicer to little fillies' or anything: fiction's fiction.

This is an interesting conversation in its awkward way, and I'm prepared to make an actual effort NOT to just relax and roll with dialect and stuff, since it's offending. I don't get why that's offensive, either, but I have the feeling that Anonymous can be awful touchy (as well as very chill and relaxed, and all other faces of anon)
>> No. 28753
>>28751
>All Hotsause does is panders to his fetishes. His fics begin and end with them. They aren't stories.

Duh. They're clops. Clops aren't stories; they are masturbatory aids, nothing more, and Jinx are boring ones at that. These never stated to be anything else but clop stories, not that asinine bullshit about gender roles Jinx is trying to feed.

They're both terrible authors, but hotsauces doesn't piss me off to no end. Laughing, maybe, but I'll take that over fuming at my screen in rage at how bad everything in Jinx stories is (even his non-clop Castle story). His style would be awesome in a detective genre, and it's completely wasted on clop that's trying (and failing) to be anything more than fap material.

>Hotsause's stuff is irredeemable in that sense

*shrugs* Sometimes, people don't care about that kind of thing in clops, they just want gratification and satisfaction of a light hearty clop.

Your main complaint is that hotsauce isn't making a story (or isn't even trying), and if you consider TMB as a story, then I hope hotsauce never does that.

Every clop is pandering, especially the fetish ones. So is TMB is also just pandering to Jinx's fetish.

At least, hotsauce has other clops that don't involve the CMC aren't like that, unless you think that HiE stories are considered a fetish. At least, his sex scenes aren't boring. At least, his fics are full of "daww" moments, and are light hearted. At least, the characters aren't cranked to 11, and are rendered (completely) retarded. At least nearly every word that's typed has actual meaning, and doesn't just meander well beyond its need. At least, the characters don't have stupid mind altering squirting mechanics, or their wings aren't important to their fucking. At least, it doesn't make up its own mythology that no one else in the story seems to know, despite living in the same place.

I could go on, but let me end it with this; these are both terrible authors, but at least hotsauce doesn't make we want to yell at my screen. Honestly, this is like someone trying to convince a jock to take up D&D, that's how different these authors are.

They're both still terrible.
>> No. 28754
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28754
Huh.

TIME FOR SOMETHING COMPLETE UNRELATED!!

YEAH!!
>> No. 28755
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>>28754
NOW (different anon) FOR SOMETHING CUTE AND WELL DESIGNED!!
>> No. 28756
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>>28755
DID SOMEBODY SAW CUTE?! BEAT THAT SUCKERS! YEAH!
>> No. 28757
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>>28753
"Clops aren't stories"? Hang on: are you only referring to works where the story is just a framing device for the clop, or are you saying that *every* work with explicit sexual content is nothing more than the text-eqivalent of a fleshlight?

Also, from the sound of things you've read a lot of Hotsauce's and AJ's work. If you detest them so much, why do you keep reading? I Honestly don't see the logic there. It would make sense if you were doing a critque, but your posts seem to list your problems without offering any suggestions for improvement.
>> No. 28758
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28758
>>28757
If they offer suggestions, or (rarely!) examples of something that they like, it's taking a BIG risk.

If the pony being lambasted is capable of handling very harsh criticism and has humility enough to analyze the proffered example, they can work out what in the example of 'good' is being done that they're not doing, and decide whether to incorporate that. I HAVE DONE this. I'm not sure if I've seen anypony else do it.

If the pony being lambasted is no better than another troll, all that does is open up a big wide avenue for demolishing the attacker- anything can be deconstructed with enough ingenuity, and the only defense is not to care about anything and live in a LOLniverse of nihilism and meaningless. So folks generally start there, and take pains to lob criticisms as if they do NOT care in the least and are merely acting as totally disinterested, unbiased, passive observers who for some reason are supposed to represent all the whole world outside the hapless pony's tiny group of brainwashed fans ;)

Fuck that! I care about stuff and don't mind admitting it. I want my stories to go a certain way, and do reach some people- I actively want to reach more, but I do actually want to NOT reach some people. I do not like the generic. I don't like stuff that's too correct. If you haven't got the cojones to be something specific enough to take some abuse or at least objections, you're blending in TOO MUCH.

That goes for Anonymous as well. You're Anonymous, for pete's sake! There is no possible reason for you not to champion examples of what you want to see! You can always claim to be a different anon, if anyone makes fun of you for your tastes!

Besides, the whole nihilism and nobody-actually-serious-about-anything is so un-pony. We all got a glimpse of earnestness and lack of guile and cynicism when we saw poni. We are still here, in a pony place, posting pony. Don't tell me sincerity's passe, or that it's unreasonable and vain to care.

You gotta share! You gotta care!

Okay, I'm done ;) *runs off*
>> No. 28759
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28759
>>28758
>There is no possible reason for you not to champion examples of what you want to see! You can always claim to be a different anon, if anyone makes fun of you for your tastes!

(different anon)
Didn't some anon already do that? >>28441 And wasn't he completely ignored?

Anyway, were not having that kind of talk. MORE CUTE STUFF AWAY!!You go Scootaloo!
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>>28759
I went and read some of "Robotic Stallion Big Lugnut"! I really appreciated that. I guess even though he said he was a different anon, I SHOULD have made a point to engage him in conversation about it. I sure didn't want to just snipe or snark about it, so I guess it came off like nobody paid attention. Apologies. Have a cute Flutterstache. :)
>> No. 28764
>>28753
> Clops aren't stories; they are masturbatory aids, nothing more,
Ugh, no. False. Wrong. A story is a story, and clop is only one aspect of what a story can have. If you honestly don't think a story can have explicit content and still remain enjoyable you need to mature as a reader.

It's when a story doesn't try to be anything more than a masturbatory aid that it loses any value as a narrative medium. People skim the set-up and get bored and close the window before reading the wrap-up. There's no point but a framing device.

Jinx actually tells a story. It's fine that you're not interested in the story but it's a story nonetheless. It's about the characters first and foremost, and there's still things to read and hold your attention after the clop segments. It's not an excuse plot, and that deserves some acclaim seeing as most others don't bother.


> So is TMB is also just pandering to Jinx's fetish.
No, it is not just pandering. It uses the bit to play with gender roles and actually pays attention to how traumatic something that could flip your gender around could be. AJ's whole thing in the stories is a struggle with her femininity in light of the world driving her to be masculine. And lately it's looking like she doesn't want the damn bit anymore. If it was pure pandering none of these questions would be raised.

As for Jinx being a terrible author?

No. He takes criticism, he has fun with his stories, he strives to improve and he cares about exploring the characters (which, to a good author, means throwing them into the gauntlet to see what they're made of). That's far from terrible.

Anyway, I've said my piece. Later.
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28769
Banal arguments like these really get my heart racing...
>> No. 28770
Someone needs to tell those riff-guys that just because someone writes in the first person, they're not writing automatically about themselves.

Also, they claim some stuff about me which is untrue and I'm pretty sure is libellous. They'd do well to reread the EULA of their little forum.

But anyhoo, Wall-eyed Angel is up to 5000 words at this moment, and gives every indication of spiralling out of all control. I'll have a taster released in a short while. It's a heavily romantic piece like my other HiE stories.

Thank you all for your continued interest in my work!
>> No. 28771
>>28770
Looking forward to seeing it, Hotsauce, and I did say "fiction's fiction" without being reminded! I also said I was meaner- given that my fiction lately has involved impaling a dying previous-life Applejack with a javelin, I suspect I'm not wrong there. Yay imagination...

I doubt implying legal action will help much with these riff guys. It might tone down their silly posturing, though, where they act like they ought to go all vigilante over your dreadful horrific pleasuring of PRETEND CARTOON PONIES.

In some ways that stuff is more alarming than any flight of fancy- you compare your fantasy of fillyish awakening to natural feelings, with their revelling in vengefulness and desire to punish, and it seriously confirms my prejudice that violence is way more obscene than sexuality.

Heh. When you're ready. Makes me grateful I can grind out 5000 words in a loooooong day, but we all work at our own pace. Half the time I get nothing because I've worn myself out just revising yet-to-come story arcs so the ending doesn't fizzle and resolves everything- but that's the novelist thing I guess.

Cheers! And again, I will read your Derpy fic with great interest. I kind of bumped her out of a place in 'Rarity' because her role wasn't working... but I'd really like to explore where she stands in all that. She's pretty simple, but that doesn't have to make her foolish in all things. Good heart, that pony. :)
>> No. 28773
>28771

I think they're confusing me with that dude from 4chan's /mlp/ who was caught downloading cp during a stream, or that other guy who was arrested for referring to something similar on Facebook. Or maybe they've just created a mythic 'hotsauce' out of the contents of my work.

It would be pretty cool to have a legion of fans made up of 'l337 h4XX0rz', ever-ready to launch 'raids' at my bidding, though. I pray for the day!

Go my pretties: DDOS, DDOS!

At least my work is getting read. I just wish it wasn't mostly by guys who're looking to get their 'jimmies rustled' by the subject matter. It's a bit disheartening.

Anyway, got to get back to writing today's sentence. I'm pretty happy with the subject, but coming up with the predicate is proving a challenge.
>> No. 28774
>>28773

Yeah I'm also a badass who has recently only been managing a sentence a day. It's pretty awesome.
>> No. 28776
>>28773
You've got a pretty large if unsavory readership base, Hotsauce, but you're not really worth fighting for to that extent, hahahaha!
>> No. 28779
>>28776
...spoke like a pony writin' clop about Rarity sinkin' into abject degradation at the claws of Spike? I would think you'd understand BETTER'n most about getting to write whatever you please without undue hassle.

As somepony who has said outright, "I want to be popular" (so I'm writin' crazy poni clop), how about you settle down a bit? There's no need for that from other writers.
>> No. 28789
>>28773
Meh, attacking them would just make them feel justified and cement in their own minds just how correct they are. People like that don't want any part of varying viewpoints, or logical discourse. They're happy with their misconceptions, and they'll defend them to the bitter end.

Not all of us are foolish enough to simply believe libelous claims quite so wholeheartedly simply because we're afraid of our own insecurities ;)

Never forget that some of us enjoy your stories for more than just the eroticism. You tell endearing tales that leave a reader feeling happy & contented inside, the sensual aspects are simply icing on the cake.

For today's predicate, work in "moaned seductively". It's tough to go wrong with that one XD
>> No. 28790
>>28774
I guess you missed the thread where I was the butt of a few affectionate jokes attacking the speed at which I write.

>>28776
It's hard to know how many people read your work. I think I've counted around 10 separate posters who are following my work on FiM, tripfags included. I don't know if that's a 'large' readership.

>>28789
Thanks anonpony. I'll try and fit it in somewhere. I don't think I use 'moan' enough in my work. I prefer 'pant' and 'gasp'.
>> No. 28794
>>28779
Oooh, oooh, we're playing the game of quotes!
Here's from chap 2: "I can have popular now?"
and chap 3: "Fine, I don't care about being popular anymore... "

and there's the fact that I've been ragging on hotsauce for a few threads now. It's not like his feelings are hurt and he'll stop posting his stories and I'm pretty sure in England if you don't have a tough skin the school teachers literally chew you out. (Btw hotsauce is from the other side of the pond)

I've gotten a few haters but also a good number of people who (for some reason) enjoyed my dark sense of "story". Not to the extent of you or hotsauce, o'course, since I'm simply not as infamous or prolific a writer.

You silly, AJ...you silly.
>> No. 28796
>>28794
Now don't you be silly. "Prances with Ponies" has both more reads and more faves than my current "Rarity's Worst Day Ever". You're doing absolutely fine.

But if you're just ragging on Hotsauce in a friendly British boarding school way, wash up well when you're done, and my apologies for takin' you too seriously- I tend to do better with earnestness, which sorta figures. Mea culpa :)
>> No. 28797
Oh, fuckin' hell. Somebody actually linked ya'll to us. Well, since you already are aware of it, I may as well provide some explanation for us. Firstly, we are a fairly tolerant group; however, there are some things that strike us as wrong, and I personally hold the belief that writing about paedophilia in a way that doesn't display it for the horrifying crime it is and instead uses it as fap-bait is just terrible. Secondly, we are as a group willing to accept alternate viewpoints if we are offered evidence that those views deserve some thought. Finally, none of us are insecure about anything; we just enjoy mocking things for the same reason the cast of MST3k mocked bad films: because it's funny.
>> No. 28798
>>28797
Speak for yourself. Paedo's fine.
>> No. 28800
>>28790
Wait! You post your stuff on Fimfiction?
Link please! I keep losing track of stuff here on the chan, warnings over there would be really helpful
>> No. 28801
>>28798

How is paedo fine in any sense of the term?
>> No. 28802
>>28798
Oh. My. Go.
What did you just type?
>> No. 28803
>>28801
Fantasies and stories about it are just fine. Actually engaging in it is not.
>> No. 28804
>>28803

I consider fantasizing about something like that shows that morally, you are as twisted as those that actually do it.
>> No. 28805
>>28804
I agree with you completely, but be prepared to get the whole "morality is subjective duh hur" speech.
>> No. 28806
>>28796
Considering they're two different ratings, E and M, I'd argue that "Prances" is simply available to a wider audience. Now if we're talkin' strictly about clop, hands down...I'd agree about having more views (haha) but you've got the faves, comments and word content. Like, 2:1.

>>28797
And more power to you guys. I can't believe that you were actually DDOSd or spammed by angry fanboys before. I used to write a few MSTs for Digimon, Bleach, Magic School Bus and other stuff.

I'm pretty doubtful, being that a lot of you guys are already so dead set against "it" that there's any amount of evidence that would make a convincing enough argument for you.

>>28801
Actual real life examples and events are terrible and reprehensible. Cartoon/imaginary depictions simply have none of the same awful effects that traumatize a real child...or pony...it very much goes against the societal norms, because it simply is a simulation of what I've already declared as my personal view as a despicable act. But there's bound to be an instance of some douche that crosses the line, but that also happens in videogames, where you're awarded for example, in shooters, fighters, RPGs, etc for gratuitous amounts of violence.

Now arguably enough, violent actions are allowed because they serve a purpose, helping a group overcome another or to institute control while viewing preadolescences (or animals) serves no benefit to society and is thus shunned. These ideas are also strengthened in religious morality under the tenets of God himself speaking out against particular actions, such as eating pork for jews/muslims (because they're dirty, dirty animals that actually did kill a lot of people because they were not properly cleaned before cooking)

There's also been a push, since the early 19th century to enshrine childhood (for reasons such as getting kids out of working in textile factories and coal mines), despite there being no significant biological evidence that I'm aware of that denotes a definitive period of "childhood" that requires our current institutions of "child friendly entertainment" or "good for kids" (Thanks, Disney).

There is the rapid and oftentimes irregular surge of hormones as part of the development of a human body, maturing both physically in terms of anatomy (muscle tissue and denser bones, etc) and chemically, in terms of the hormones and neurological activity (stronger neuron connections that add onto the hand-eye, motor control, etc that happens from birth to age 2) that really starts to kick off, that differs slightly from person to person. Meaning that "childhood" as a stage is an entirely human construct idea of development, relating more to a person's ability to participate in society rather than function as a human being.

I'd be remiss to play down the huge importance of properly attaining and understanding one's society in terms of norms, taboos and expectations during preadolescence, of course, but ultimately our enjoyment, for whatever our personal reasons may be, of things like paedo relations of humans with cartoon ponies does NOT in any discernible way, automatically translate to the want of real action. There are no victims. You can't prosecute for an imaginary crime.

My reason for liking hotsauce's works? Personally, I'd say simply that I'm a pretty terrible person. Because of the anonymity afforded to me by the internet I can say in forums what it is that brings me enjoyment without suffering the cost that would in the wider society. Also, being that it's simply written about, not in the most eloquent of ways, of course, additionally I enjoy also the fact that it's taboo in the first place, and that I'm defying society's demands without causing undue harm to anyone.

So there.
>> No. 28808
>>28806
Other examples of actions that destroy morality are masturbation, inter-racial marriage and letting women read and/or drive cars.

Also at one point slavery was a fine institution that was religiously tolerable
>> No. 28809
>>28806

You miss my point. I acknowledge that there are no victims, but just the fact that people find this to be suitable fap material pisses me off. Hell, as it is it creeps me out a bit that people find stuff involving cartoon horses suitable fap material. Furthermore, I define childhood as the period between birth and puberty. It is not a societal construct as much as it is us doing what we can to know what people of which ages should know what. If you expose children to too much horrible shit early in life, they get jaded and more likely to give up on life out of a sense of meaninglessness. And you are okay to this due to it being rebellious? I honestly can't say anything about that. Listening to music to be rebellious in one thing; it it quite another to masturbate to something widely regarded as wrong.

PS: please don't use any "morality is subjective" arguments. There's no quicker way to make me lose all respect for you as a person than making that argument.
>> No. 28811
>>28809
>I'm pretty doubtful, being that you guys are already so dead set against "it" that there's any amount of evidence that would make a convincing enough argument for you

it creeps me out a bit that people find stuff involving cartoon horses suitable fap material
>it very much goes against the societal norms

not a societal construct as much as it is us doing what we can to know what people of which ages should know what
>I'd be remiss to play down the huge importance of properly attaining and understanding one's society in terms of norms, taboos and expectations during preadolescence

If you expose children to too much horrible shit early in life, they get jaded and more likely to give up on life out of a sense of meaninglessness.
>relating more to a person's ability to participate in society rather than function as a human being

And you are okay to this due to it being rebellious?
>I'm a pretty terrible person. Because of the anonymity

please don't use any "morality is subjective" arguments
>allowed because they serve a purpose
>> No. 28814
>>28811

Very good, you can point out how you got my points in my argument, but not my argument itself! You have a gift, mah boi, for missing the forest while seeing the trees. May I please discuss this with somebody else? I have a feeling discussing this with you will have more facepalm-inducing examples of you missing the crux of my argument.
>> No. 28816
Actually, Nihilistic, I fail to see how it would be possible to have a discussion with somebody believing in thoughtcrime.
>> No. 28817
>>28797
Yeah, I'm with typewriter pony- more power to you guys, carry on. What kind of jerk would try to DDOS a mstin' site? Or whatever you are- seems about as far from my tastes as SA, but you should get to have your fun unmolested.

For what it's worth you've got my blessing and if any of my fans try to DDOS you I will yell at them. Not sure what damage three ponies weak from clopping would do. Maybe they'd make you sticky. I'll keep them clear ;)
>> No. 28818
>>28814
I can pretty much boil your argument to "it's all immoral and wrong and we should feel bad because it makes you feel sick".

Now, I would HATE to lose YOUR respect. I couldn't stand the thought. You've become like, my favorite person EVER. But I've said nothing even CLOSE to "morality is subjective" but morality is wholly dependent on what a society determines it to be. And only actions and behaviors that benefit society are seen as moral: Obeying authority. Not killing kinsmen or fellow citizens. No stealing. No cheating. Limiting sexual actions to procreation for the sake of population growth (So that means being aroused by animals or children is an aberration which, thanks to evolution, humans generally follow this rule on their own if they want to continue the species.)

And so, thanks to the experience of hundreds of years of living together in society, humans cobbled together rules and laws of how to act. A system of punishments and rewards came about through institutions of religion as well as of the local rulers. That you'd burn in hell or that you'd be reborn as a bug, if you didn't act morally. That you'd go to a paradise or you'll be bestowed with great luck if you were a moral and upright person. There are also practical punishments and rewards such as jail/execution/etc, praise/etc.

The repercussions of exposing kids to "too much horrible shit early in life" are way worse than succumbing to ennui. But that has nothing to do with a bunch of dudes on the internet reading stuff that go against your morals or what's acceptable by society at large. At all. I accept that as a group, the guys on your site are "willing to accept alternate viewpoints if [you] are offered evidence that those views deserve some thought" Now, there are entire books written by much smarter people than I, that are made in an effort to explain why people like what they do and I'm quite assured from how you've responded so far that no argument in the world exists that you personally will accept to let others be if they enjoy something that you can't personally stand. And I appreciate your difference of opinion but I felt very slighted to be discarded like an idiot for stating my points and making an effort to show you how your response to those points were already answered by contrasting them.

Instead of using your cute "trees for the forest" line, and making your tone of disrespect of me when I tried to present an argument by calling me a "boi" the least you could have done to prevent me from further misunderstanding was to say I was wrong then help me understand your argument, because it sure wasn't conveyed very well.

At the end of the day, this entire exercise is moot, so despite the silliness of the subject matter in the grand scheme of things I'd like to at least pretend we can have a constructive argument on the internet without it devolving into ad hominems or disparagement of the other side.
>> No. 28821
>>28818
>>28818
Oook, another anon here. I'm too sleep deprived to understand all those things you wrote. But i think i can figure out already that i like you.
And i would like to tell you that you should really not waste time discussing on the internet. Especially about morality and opinions.
Remember, it's like winning the retard race. You lose just for wasting time on it.
>> No. 28824
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28824
for all of you
>> No. 28845
>>28790

I know. It was my intention to joke along with you, in that I've also been commented on as a slow writer. Because I am.

>>28797

Um, who are you? Who is "us?"
>> No. 28848
Alrighty then. What I want in a hotsauce fic is a small amount of storyline that is easily followable, some well written clop, and a few daww moments thrown in here and there. So far, I love every single story hotsauce has written, and yet I sit here staring at a tiny iPhone screen looking at people taking apart his work price by price just to point out how they are right and the other person is wrong and all he while just engage In a meaningless argument over nothing. Stop not picking dammit! If you don't like he story for ANY REASON AT ALL then you damn well don't read it! It's simple, now, either read what he comes up with next and fap (or daww, it depends) or just leave this website and find something better to do.
>> No. 28849
*piece by piece,*nit *the
Fuck you auto correct.
>> No. 28850
I realize some of you may not be "moved" by my wisdom as to actually cut the crap and move on with your lives, and I respect that. However, it's YOUR time you're wasting, nopony else's. Think about that next time you start writing another long winded rebuttal to someone's rebuttal of your argument entailing exactly HOW someone didn't write a fic to YOUR exact specifications. It might help to think that writers don't always write for their audience, they write what they want to. If thousands of people like it then good! If not, oh well. It's no use getting on someone for doing what they like... unless they're hurting someone. Intentionally mind you.
>> No. 28851
>>28850
Oh, I read it because in life, there are horrible things that must be mocked. Not mocking this would have been like seeing someone commit a crime that no one else would have bothered reporting and deciding not to do it because everybody else would have just turned their heads. And you failed to address my argument and insulted me.
>> No. 28852
Plus, I didn't come here, fearsomely twanging about the mock. I just saw that some moron posted it here and decided that I should explain myself.
>> No. 28853
>>28851
...but what if we want to mock you?

I'm not sayin'- I'm just sayin'. Seems like you figure the rule is, you're the mockER and not the mockEE. But to people who either create stuff or seek out stuff to fap to (that being the main point of clopfics), when you take it as a mission to explain how aesthetically offended you are, they're understandably wondering why they should bother deferring to you. They might wish some credentials, or evidence that you can enlighten them in a serious way- again, I'll point you to the Red Letter Media 'Plinkett' videos on the Star Wars prequels, which are brilliant and will teach you a lot.

Or, if you're just going to caper and fling poo, it had better be entertaining in its own right- and you're much less likely to be considered anything but an alternate puppet-show yelling from a competing stage. Which is fine! There is no special reason you should be taken with any seriousness. The role of the funny-guy who isn't particularly admirable goes back to Jerry Seinfeld, or Don Rickles, and before that W.C. Fields. You're part of a tradition, like it or not.

If you can find a way to take your mock ONSTAGE and perform it for a live audience and get them to actually laugh- that's when I'll be really impressed and brohoof you in a serious way.

But to do that, you do have to be less lazy and work at doing your thing, rather than just assuming that because you want to mock, it'll work as 'funny'. To say something like,

>because in life, there are horrible things that must be mocked

makes it sound like it's easy. You kind of need to do your mock better than the stuff you mock. It's sort of on the same level, though if I remember correctly you were one of the better ones of the lot- which is a bit like saying someone is one of the better fic-writers on FIMfiction. I don't think your site is especially exclusive- doesn't seem very filtered. Maybe it will improve as you practice :)
>> No. 28854
>>28851
And that ( >>28850 ) was not insulting you. I've explained how you guys might be able to mock at mockery levels greater and more entertaining than your typical FIMfiction story- if you practice, since you don't seem to be putting as much effort into your craft as most FIMfiction posters do.

THAT is an insult. You should try harder, and be funnier. Mockery isn't really any easier than regular storywriting, you only think it is because you assume any Pony Joe off the street will automatically see things your way if prompted. We writers learn real quick that we can't trust our audience that much, and you're still figuring out that you can't trust your audience to be amused. NEVER settle for "augh my eyes this is so horrible". Point out not only specifically what dismays you, but put it in context with what you'd expected or wanted, and be the aggrieved aesthete with a vivid and clear sense of the right by DEFINING that right, and contrasting your victim's failings eloquently. And

>Ha ha ha. It's funny because it's Applejack, but with jack replaced with cock. I thought you guys needed explanation, since it's such a funny joke.

Never do this gag again. It's the definition of lazy, and so many of your other riffs were unexpected and creative that it's a total letdown to see you cop out with a brainless point-and-laugh. You're better than that, kid.
>> No. 28855
>>28853
>>28854
OH MY GOD SHUT THE FUCK UP AND CRY SOMEWHERE ELSE!! GET SOME THICKER SKIN, YOU'RE WRITING A SHITTY FUTA FIC WHAT DID YOU EXPECT?!
>> No. 28856
>>28854
>be funnier

Oh, is that all? How helpful.
>> No. 28857
>>28854
No ones going to listen to the Tom Preston of clop, one who refuses to change his writing style, uses verbose like it's a machine gun (what the hell is brevity?!), and wouldn't know what characterization, proper pacing, and basic coherence is if it was physically manifested itself and punched you in the face.

Sorry, if you're terrible at something, you're going to get mocked. What part of that don't you get?

I'm prepared for a 9000+ word response that could of been summed up in less than 1000 words that basically says "BAAWWWW!" over and over.
>> No. 28858
>>28853
>...but what if we want to mock you?

Careful guy's we got a badass here. I guess we're still in grade school, huh? Like anyone over the age of 15 cares about being mocked by a total nobody mocking a total nobody. Stop being so sensitive about people not liking your "fanfic."
>> No. 28859
Hey, I think this thread just auto saged.
>> No. 28861
>>28857
>what the hell is brevity?!
>complains on an internet forum
>doesn't bother to look it up
>> No. 28862
I really don't give a damn what you guys think, I was just hoping that I could save you all a few hours of moaning and griping, but APPARENTLY I'm just feeding the trolls. I shall no longer post anything to do with arguments unless I start Them myself.
>> No. 28864
>>28861
Someone doesn't get it. You missed the point so hard it hurts.

I hope all that hard thinking didn't mush your brain even harder, you failed abortion.
>> No. 28865
>>28862
Because anyone who thinks differently and doesn't understand your spasmodic "arguments" and "points" is a troll.

Come on dude, you didn't even use capitalization right.

>>28861
You're a special kind of stupid, aren't you?
>> No. 28866
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>>28864
ha, you got mad at an anon. have some internet points.

>>28865
The kind that's sent to a School for, sonnn
>> No. 28868
>>28859
*g* it autosaged DAYS ago, you just didn't notice.

Seriously, guys, just be funnier. It's fine what you're doing, part of what makes the internet so colorful, just make it be funny, OK? Nihilistic is quite good, really, I liked the weird tangents. If you're gonna do something, and you CAN do it good, you kinda SHOULD do it good.

I'm certainly not going to start writing more defensively just because he exists, so there should be ample opportunity for more riffage if he wants. It's all good.
>> No. 28870
>>28868
Talk about schizophrenia...
>> No. 28871
>>28857
I never knew who Tom Preston was, and never realized that he drew the sorta-decent looking comic that always seemed to get onto DevArt's front page.

But after learning his story...I feel an imperative to get better. To understand that I must improve. That I must never become him.

Thank you, anon. Thank you for your angry bitching.

Thank you.
>> No. 28872
>>28871
If you think that's something, you should check out foreverpandaring's video on Tom Preston, or Tom's comic getting reviewed on the bad webcomics wiki. You will be surprised.
>> No. 28874
Looking at what's happened to this thread I'm thinking the autosaging is probably a mercy-killing.
Anyway, I'll be back with either Wall-Eyed Angel or Foalin' Around 3: First Bloom (which I've also started working on).
>> No. 28881
>>28872
yup, yup and yup

>>28874
Just killin' time here, Hotsauce. Hopefully there'll be a new thread for your story update

Also, what's up with you showing up so often lately? It's kind of...odd...
>> No. 28907
>>28874


I can't wait! Foal Around three is going to be awesome.

Should we start a new thread or just keep this one?
>> No. 29033
Agh! Shit! Sorry 28865, I'm on an iPhone, so the capitalization and spelling is sometimes hard to pull off correctly. And by trolls, I understand I should have chosen something a bit more... accurate. The phrase almost works though, as all I did was invite more arguments and negative comments... Such as the one you posted about my "spasmodic arguments." You wound me sir. Deeply. I almost dropped my monocle I was so aggrieved. *twirls mustache* Enough contention. Let us all sip tea and nibble crumpets until Sir Hotsauce the Magnanimous conveys his next gift of writing. That's right, I propose we give Hotsauce a knighthood! Hence the sir. Also, what word would work as a title better than magnanimous? We should vote!
>> No. 29703
>>28874
Looking forward to it.
>> No. 30077
I get the feeling there's a new thread, or at least that this one is all but dead. If there is a new thread, would someone please link me to it?
>> No. 30135
>>29030

New thread
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