>>28500
not sure i should read. maybe if i run out of things to read i will consider it.

Got a huge ass backlog of books that don't have anything to do with ponies to get through. But I definitely will keep my eye out for more Rita art.

>>28500
I'll be giving this a read when I get the time, probably on the weekend. Pacce's other FOE fic was pretty damn good. Although it took until seeing Madmax's art for the story before I found it.

debauchery, vulgarity, manipulation, vivid sexuality, and intense violence. If you're still reading, that means you might just be the intended audience- well being on fimchan I think you've probably hooked the average user there

>>28575
Well, that first chapter was pretty good. Looking forwards to seeing how it all unfolds.

Double Tap is the first protaginist I've met so far who just wants to kill. BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD! *Ahem* Would be interesting to know where he met Rita and why she's interested in the ministry mares, although probably more importantly why she has a bomb collar on.

Looking good so far.

>>28596
Tap is an anti-hero without the hero part. He is the worst pony to be a protagonist, which of course makes him the best pony to be a protagonist. Of course, as you'll see, Rita isn't much better.

And fear not, all your curiosities will be satisfied in due time.

And there goes chapter 2.

I dunno if it's just me, but why is Rita so dam sexy?!
>>28513
^
that image

>>28624
nope, not just you
I'd plow that ass until next july

>>28606
Hehe, just don't answer them too quickly, always good to leave a few threads open.

Chapter two, seems to be getting into the main thrust of the story.
More characterization of the main protagonists (can they be called that if they're also the main antagonists?) is always welocme, particularly Pahrita. Can see a lot better now how she fits in with Double Tap, in that she's highly eccentric in her own way and also delights in causing mayhem (if indirectly sometimes), to the point where getting credited with taking down the wasteland's biggest hero and the infamy that comes with it is the best thing ever which is quite chilling. Also The whole Empress Pahrita thing going on there.
Tap's first run in with Ponyville is interesting. I wonder how he got out of there probably almost as much as he does (the imagery seemed like some malevolent force did it). Similarly Tap's nightmares hint at something of a haunted past, especilly with the mare, which could be a nice running plot thread. His thirst for killing is obviously still strong in the present. The joke with the last bandit was especially grim.

The chemistry between Tap and Rita is still great, the intereaction between the pair and Gawd was orchestrated really well and that new gun is ridiculous (I was half expecting Tap to kill the surviving ponies, but its good to see he has limits).

Although the pair are completely doomed in their mission, no doubt it'll be awesome watching them try.

>>28643
I've got lots of tricks up my sleeves, fear not.

Someone once told me that, on their own, they're too crazy to be good characters, but together, they achieve some kind of fantastic synergy. If I had to pick one of them as more evil than neutral, though, it would probably be Paharita by nature of her being a complete sociopath and also kind of a batman villain. So yeah, they're pro-antagonists!

Lips are sealed about Ponyville. The mysterious strangeness surrounding that, and the mare, will become more clear as time goes on. Where Rita is like a batman villain, Tap is kind of like Rorschach when it comes to killing raiders. He takes a lot of pleasure in indirectly avenging his father.

Punchline is best gun. Someone on FiMFic pointed out how impractical it is, but that's the point! The punchline of the Punchline, so to speak. Also he didn't kill the survivors because he wasn't getting paid to kill them.

Also, who knows! What if I go crazy, non-canon alternate reality?!

>>28643
Yeah Tap and Rita are a crazy pair to be sure. But Tap would never go out of his way to kill or even hurt somepony that wasn't bothering him. He's a ruffian to be sure and sometimes even a sadistic bully, but you have to get him started first. Rita on the other hand would never go out of her way for anything that doesn't have to do with her own interests, but if she thinks somepony is in her way (whatever that way may be) she won't hesitate to use brutal force to remove them. Luckily for everyone, everywhere she is neither physically imposing or good with any sort of weapon or even particularly very durable and she's not doing anything if she doesn't think she'll be able to walk away from it.

Yeah, I love that gun. It's as likely to kill or maim Tap as it is the target. Hopefully he'll never have to fire it in rapid succession.

As for Lady Luck, psh, just an urban legend. Stay focused on the real story.

Honestly, I like their chances against some silly pony who's decided she's some kinda super hero. So long as she doesn't know their coming, I think they may have what it takes. It's a fanfic after all, non-canon is its basis and it goes from there. We aren't kidding when we say that reading the full FoE is NOT a requirement. I certainly haven't (yet) and I'm helping write the damn thing!

>>28644
>>28645
Oh wow, this could go truly off the wall then. Also would keep the element of suprise open the whole way.
Also if they succeed it could be an emotional punch for readers who liked that particular character.
Even with Punchline Steelhooves is still a major threat. Unless they know he's a Canterlot ghoul I don't fancy their chances. If I knew I had one shot with that weapon, I'd aim for the centre of body mass, which is the biggest target and with a close range AM hit would do the job on a normal pony. Unfortunately Steelhooves could quite easily survive.
Not to mention they have to get in close and deal with his EFS. Admittedly a headshot would get around most of those issues and the others if caught unawares are pretty much doomed.
As for the original story, I'd reccomend reading up to the Enclave's involvement, if only for the potential for more people to fight with or get contracts from.

>>28653

They're probably going build a tailor customed arsenal to kill all of them. Minus Velvet she'll be a easy kill. The duo needs to completely overwhelm them as fast as possible, Tap can't fight for shit in a direct confrontation, Littlepip is pretty much his best match with that GPS and time-stopping spell. But as Father Elijah said, conviences like that dull the brain, take them away and you can't function. The fact it's fused to her body symbolizes her dependance on that gadget. They disable that, she's blind. The others might have some fight but with the two that could easily fuck both of them over down it won't be that hard. If they actually retreat for and then strike again against the survivors once their guard is down they will have a even better chance.

They will have to blow off Steelhooves' head to fully kill him though. Which may prove difficult despite the events of the source material. In Dead Money when you blow off a limb you can still hear them breathing provided the Ghost Person (the fuck is the singular for that?) still has his head

>>28661
>>28653
All these ideas! Well, there's several days that Pip has wiped from her memory, so that opens up a lot of possibility for an encounter that would fit into the continuity.

Unless I do go completely alternate reality. We'll see.

The goal of this story is to provide an entertaining and enjoyable read. If I score points for creativity and originality, that's cool too. This is also a story about the characters, and not about a quest to fix a broken world.

Tap and Rita come first and everything else comes second is what I'm saying, I guess.

Does that make sense, or is this all nonsensical?

>>28672
Sense? You? Never!

>>28672
Yeah it makes sense. Honestly I prefer stories about characters rather than focusing on an epic quest (which is possibly why I like Project Horizons and Heroes a lot).
'Course the characters can be on an epic quest but I do like character driven stories.

come on! this waiting for chapter 3 is painful!

>>28708
My fault. I'm working on something. Couple more days.

>>28763
I guess its ok if your improving it then :3 its just taking forever!

>>28763
Like thet say, good things come to those who wait.

>>28775
>>28793
We appreciate your patience. To tide you over have a nibble of what I'm working on.
It's called "Anywhere but Here: Odds and Ends" and is the episodic adventures of Rita and Tap in the wasteland before Littlepip stuck her blushing muzzle in the world above.

The first story is about the partner Rita had before Double Tap and its coming along swimmingly.

The bartender made a noise between a grunt and a growl and went down the bar, far away from the chattering griffon. Rita drummed her talons on the bar to the rhythem of the sad music crooning from the old jukebox as her eyes drifted over the nearby patrons. To her left, a tough looking unicorn in a bulky black jacket sat slamming shot after shot of whiskey. But what caught her eye wasn’t his alcohol tolerance or his muscled physique, it was the patch on his right shoulder depicting a lightning bolt coming from a cloud.

Rita’s eyes lit up like sparklers and she immediately began jabbing the pony in the side with a curled finger. “Excuse me,” she said quickly, poking with each word. “You, sir, hey, you. Hey. Sir. Hey.”

With all the speed of mountain erosion, the pale yellow, turned to look at her. “What the fuck do you want?”

“Hi,” she said, sitting back and giving a warm smile. “Are you a fellow fan of the fastest, bluest, and coolest pony to ever dance on clouds?” The pony stared at her slack jawed and bleary eyed. Rita reached out and tapped twice on the patch. She spoke fast, excitement raising her voice, “This here. This is the mark of one of the 6 Ministry Mares, Rainbow Dash, head of the Ministry of Awesome and the first recorded pony to perform a sonic rainboom.” Rita’s eyes rolled up as she went through her mental index. “She was the last captain of the stunt flyers, the Wonderbolts before the group was dissolved and reformed into the tactical strike force, the Shadowbolts. Of the six Ministry Mares, she was the only one to see front line combat. She had the most confirmed kills of any pony during the war and that was before she went into the more hush-hush kinda’ jobs!”

When Rita stopped to take a breath, the dazed unicorn spoke up. “Lady, I have no idea what the fuck you’re blathering about. I bought this jacket from a merchant years ago. The patch just shows that I strike fast, ya know, like lightning.”

“Oh,” Rita slumped on her bar stool, her entire body deflating, the light going from her eyes. She perked up instantly as a thought popped in her head. “Do you remember the merchant’s name or description, or their route, or where they are now?”

>>28823

This is one of those stories that has a lot of potential. I know it takes forever to write something like this and motivation can wane or other things get in the way (I know from bitter experience and many failed projects), but this really is one of those cases where it would be a real shame if it lurched to a halt.

>>29229
I have chapter 3 all ready to go and LOADS of ideas for what lies ahead, but there are some real-life complications that have ground production to a temporary halt.

In the mean time, I'm working on some more fetishy side projects and also Blood is Thicker than Friendship. Don't you worry though, I'm not planning on abandoning Anywhere any time soon.

Yo buddy,
Still Alive?

>>30342
He dead.

"The horror! The horror!"

>>30342
>>30344
Working on chapter 4. Teeming with ideas, most of which are mid to major spoilers. Wondering how far is too far for a good number of said ideas. Re-evaluating how much actual work I'm going to end up putting into this story if I follow through on a specific set of said ideas.

What I can discuss, however, is the concept of a potential party member.

Pre-war researcher that was on vacation in Canterlot when the cloud hit. Lived and worked in Fillydelphia, studying parasprites and potential ways to control them for things like waste disposal or demolition.

Flash forward two centuries: Now a Canterlot ghoul that wandered back to Filly and continued his research, he eventually ended up working for Red Eye. His work has reached the prototype stages of a way to train or at least control small groups of parasprites via high frequency transmission, but as of yet, they still only eat flesh.

He has successfully genetically engineered and trained a small swarm of parasprites that produce infertile offspring, ensuring that they do not continue to reproduce beyond the parent group, and self destruct soon after their creation.

The parent group lives inside his body as though he were a hive, feeding only when he commands them to do so. Due to the regenerative properties of a Canterlot ghoul, this essentially renders his non-cranial tissue and organs as ammunition to be expended in the creation of weaponized parasprites.

Ladies and gentlemen, I give you Pestilence.

Oh, and Pacce is almost thawed out. I'm confident you'll love what he's (finally) bringing to the table.

>>30347

So he's The Pain if he wasn't pants on head retarded? Mite b cool. Ideas are always good but don't bloat your story too much, something most other FOE sidefics fuck up on. I'm curious what Pacce has up his sleeve considering I thought he turned up dead.

>>30347
Werent parasprites already tamed by rarity to remove ink from books, like when Littlepip was in fillydelphia and there was that one building she had to go clear out?

>>30347
sounds pretty cool, although I have to agree with above anon, don't neccasarily have too many characters in the party.

Since you say you're working on chapter 4 I assume 3 is almost ready to roll?

>>28500
There are only going to be a maximum of three to four members in the party at any given time (until maybe endgame scenarios), and not all party members are permanent, or even possible.

As of now, including Tap and Rita, the roster of potential characters is in the nineish range. I say some might not be possible because, with the exception of Tap and Rita, their joining the party depends entirely on the path the story takes. Some would be friendlies might become enemies and vice versa based on how things unfold.

>>30350
Shit.

My counter argument is as follows: If taming parasprites were still in common practice, the carniverous parasprite infestation of post-war Fillydelphia would be an easy fix.

Maybe he's using the work done by the Ministry of Image as the foundation of his research?

>>30355
Chapter 3 is 100% done, but we're waiting on Pacce because the Rita thing he's doing is a direct tie in and relevant to Chapter 3. Please be patient. He's had a lot of stupid things to deal with in the past few months, hence the delay.

Sweet. I am looking forward to Pacce's Rita thing, it should be good. I did hear Pacce had a lot on his plate.

>>30364
Pacce is a fag.

>>30368
You... don't get how tripcodes work, do you?

>>30369
or maybe it was intentional...

Maybe.

>>30369
>>30371
>>30372
Just ya know, making an observation.

Chapter 4 is nearing completion. The plus side to this holdup is that I'm building up a backlog like I had originally intended for Blood.

Anyway, have a preview.


Tap yawned and stretched, looking over at Rita again. She was still busy with the security bot, hunched over in her state of concentration. The unicorn sighed and flopped onto the bed, feeling around for the bottle and snagging it with his magic. The first few swigs didn’t hit him at first, but about a quarter of the way through the bottle, his whole face lit up, the room rolling and spinning. A wonderful tingling sensation sprang up across his sheath, sending a shiver through him. His mind began to flood with memories; sights and smells of sexual conquests past.

He sluggishly rolled onto his back, slipping a forehoof hoof down his belly, nudging and prodding until he felt cold air around the head of his cock. With a wide grin and one last ray of hope, he glanced over at where Rita had been standing, hoping she would notice his growing erection and come running. She briefly glanced up at him, then went right back to what she was doing.

“Fuckin’ robots!” he loudly proclaimed, putting the mouth of the bottle back to his lips.

Anywhere but Here is taking FOREVER! bamp so Pacce might actually finish his Odds and Ends

>>30619
Hahaha
Tap totally got cockblocked

>>30649
WAIT NO LONGER

ODDS AND ENDS IS AMONG US

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45014/Anywhere-But-Here%3A-Odds-and-Ends

>>30734

>>30734
Well, this made my day.

>>30734
The Iron Stag seems a lot like Khârn the Bounty hunter, he's really scary and I'm amazed he hasn't gotten himself killed yet.

Whatever line there is in being a hero I think he left it behind a long, long time ago. I get the feeling he's veering dangerously close to Judge Death territory with all of the torturous murder he throws around.

>>30771
They had it coming.

Did your morally positive character in Fallout not do despicable acts of violence to the bad guys?

>>30777
There's a difference between bringing violence on bad guys and killing them in the most unpleasant way to hand. It's my belief that if you're going to dispense justice you should strive to keep yourself as far above the people you're after as possible, otherwise you're almost as bad as they are.

The Iron Stag shows some of the worst traits of vigilantism, which honestly is why he's interesting. I like the character though I despise his methods. Characters with really messed up moral compasses are probably the best if they're written well- something that you can pull off fantastically.

>>30777
My moral character went through the game non-lethally.

>>30788
How the hell do you run through a dessert wasteland with a gun fighting psychos without killing anyone?

>>30793
Two words:

Golden. Gloves.
High speech/science/sneak and a hunting shotgun with bean bag also helped but I probably could have done it just with that.

>>30795
I tip my hat, and then ask you to let me have your children.

>>30793
A dessert wasteland sounds delicious

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>>30802
Welcome to/fic/.
WE DON'T LIKE PUNS

>>30807
It was a joke, I assure you they are unbanned.

There's one thing that's been bugging me about the beginning of the chapter. There's the hilarity of the conversation with the recorder (I did get confused there- had to read it a couple of times for all of the different characters to come out. I have no idea how I managed to miss everyone but the recorder and Pahrita on the first read), there's a page break then four years earlier. Does that mean it's four years before the recording or does it mean this chapter is some kind of prologue (being chapter none) set four years before the rest of it?

Also I haven't mentioned how much I love Pahrita. The bar scene and her frustration was pure awesome, also the way she's just chirpy after the fights is great and the huge switch in character when Stag is being intimidating. Reminds me a teeny tiny bit of Harley Quinn from the old batman cartoons.

>>30812
Four years before the recording.
Also, I color coded the recording to make it easier.
Pink for Rita
Black for her partner
Red for a lady she doesn't get on with
And all italics when Rita is doing a funny voice while pretending to be the recorded talking at her because she's a bit daft.

And thank you, Rita is a theme away from being a Batman villain and Harley Quinn (when she's not chasing the joker) is pretty much exactly the kinda criminal she'd be. If only there were more banks to knock over in the Wasteland...

>>30813
Oh I see! I thought the italics was the recorder. That makdms a lot more sense.

>>30816
mobile fail.

Is this potentially going to be a thing?

>>31101
Eventually.
I wanted Tap painting Rita's nails while she paints Tap's hoof to be a scene ever since the rough draft of Anywhere with Tap shuddering at the thought what he had to go through to get her nail polish.

But I know it'd be a while off and I wanted it NOW soooo thanks Rose!

>>31101
This must be the cutest thing! are these characters from that HUGE fallout equestria fic or are they separate, i know nothing of the series.

>>31119
They're from one of the many offshoots.

We're trying something different! We're also only two chapters in, plus one prequel chapter.

>>31119
They're from the story for which you are in the thread of.

It's a spin-off fic. The main story linked here: >>28500 starts off during the middle of the main Fallout Equestria story and has many direct connections to it throughout.

The prequel, Odds and Ends, linked here:
>>30734
Starts years before Fallout Equestria starts and only shares a few characters with that story and has no spoilers for it since it will wrap up just as the main Anywhere story starts.

One is big ol' adventure, the other is an episodic series.

Pick your poison or drink em both to enhance the experience.

>>31101
Gonna read it just because of this drawing.

>>31131

just finished reading the two chapters of anywhere but here and odds and ends.
Rita is absolutely adorable. would love to find out why she has a limp and bomb collar.And I wonder if said bomb collar will lead to unfortunate events in the future. no that I want unfortunate events to happen
Very fun story, can't wait to read more.

am i the only one that likes to imagine Rita spinning on a rotating bar stool while laughing when she was in the bar in odds and ends?

oh hey look, I'm posting again within a short timespan. I guess I am obsessed :/

Not sure if it was brought up earlier but I'm going to ask anyways.


Why was Lifebloom visiting Rita? lasting injuries? I doubt it's about the bomb collar. Don't think a doctor would know much about dealing with it, plus the way it doesn't seem to register as more than an article of clothing to most anyone, I doubt it's much of a threat(though it has potential to be one). I can only really think of whatever happened to her leg to give her the limp, but it doesn't seem like something that would need frequent attention. especially since it doesn't seem to be much of a concern. I say frequent attention because the way Tap reacted to Lifebloom's presence implies that it's a recurring event, almost as if it's a daily thing or something.
or perhaps it's another ailment? possibly poisoning of some kind? perhaps alcohol doesn't sit too well with her?

could it be that the mare Tap keeps dreaming about is his mother? and is she possibly also the person who saved Tap?

How did Rita go about acquiring a stable? just happened upon it? same with her pipbuck?

Who was Rita talking to in the opening dialogue of odds and ends?

What would happen to Tap if it turned out his father is still alive? would he lose motivation because he's not, nor has he been, getting the revenge he wanted?

maybe i'm asking too many questions?

Sorry

>>31170
who was Rita talking to at the beginning of odds and ends? We'll probably find out about that in the main story too.
they were talking about interesting companions *shudder* at one point and I get the feeling the person is one of them.

>>31170
wait, disregard that first bit about Rita. just reread that section, was not the case.

though it does bring up the question why he was in bed with the two

>>31169
I assure you, you are not.
>>31170
Oh. My. I've always wanted to see a post like this directed at something I worked on. We have folks CURIOUS?! My goodness.

Well, I'm not going to answer everything, but here goes:

Rita's limp, collar, pipbuck, and Stable Tech flack jacket will be explained. Some of it sooner than others.

No one really reacts to the collar, because, well, slaves are a thing that happens. And they'd only be a danger to anyone else if they were, let's say, hugging the person when it detonated. Mostly they'd probably just wonder who the slave belongs to.

Lifebloom was not there for MEDICAL reasons. Nudge, nudge, wink, wink.

And Tap was just familiar with the good doctor because he and Rita have been residents of Tenpony for well over a year and Lifebloom IS the local physician and, well, Tap has a history of booze, drugs, unusual sex, radiation poisoning, and getting shot.

Tap's dream woman, Lady Luck, is a figure who will be open to a lot of interpretation.

Tap and Rita don't have a Stable, their hideout is more like a garage that connects to the sewers and the basement of the building above.

And as for who Rita was talking to besides Tap and herself, as >>31172 guessed, its a character we haven't met yet in Anywhere.

As for your question about Tap's father, I'll let Stonershy field that one.

>>31170
His dad is very, very dead.

But if he weren't, and Tap met him in the wasteland one day, like, "Son, I've been looking for you all this time!"

Without exaggeration, Tap would start sobbing hysterically and hug his father like his life depended on it. After that, Tap would basically say, to Rita, "I'm done," collect his caps, and retire from assassination to do whatever with his father.

He fucking hates raiders, but he's not committed to any real cause. He's just angry and hurt, and has nothing to fight for besides petty and indirect revenge.

>>31186
please look at >>31182

so no one questions why a slave is able to toss caps out willy nilly?

And why does Tap wonder why Rita hates him?

>We have folks CURIOUS?! My goodness
Curiosity is my middle name. Okay, so it's not. It's actually Benjamin. But when I really enjoy something I do like to question it, if only to understand it better. Kinda like how people go looking at lore, although I find communicating with the authors a lot more fun.

>>31187
makes sense.

>>31187
Aah, petty and indirect revenge... The kind that just keeps on giving.

>>31189
Okay, boring answer time:
Tap woke up from a blackout state (that's when you're so intoxicated you can't remember anything from the night before) all he can recall is what's in Chapter 1. And he came too after and finds himself feeling all the fatigue of a lotta sex and with another guy in bed whom he has to interact with whenever he gets hurt, which is quite often.

TL;DR Tap is pretty sure that Rita brought Lifebloom in to make it a threesome for her own enjoyment. And well, Tap is a little butthurt. PUN!

>>31194
ahhh, that makes sense.

but wouldnt it be funnier if he was the one that told him to join.
how would tap know, he likes to black out and play a guessing game.

>>31195
GET OUTTA MY HEAD!

>>31196

any chance we could get an eta on the next chapter
(either odds and ends or anywhere but here)?
days, weeks, months? really any kind of information would be quite pleasant regardless of the answer given.

>>31199
Odds 2 is coming along and should be done soon. Shooting for this weekend for Odds 2.

Anywhere 3 and 4 are done and waiting on me while 5 is in production. 3 will be out shortly after Odds 2.

>>31201
awesome!
:D

“You’d better get me an autograph before you kill her, or I’m not gonna let you stick it in me until you’ve done something to deserve it!” Rita puffed out her cheeks and pouted while Tap gawked. Moments later, she snorted out a giggle. “Okay, maybe not that long, but you’re at least gonna have to beg first.”

A low groan rolled out of Tap’s throat as he leaned against the wall, his adrenaline surge fading, replaced with a monstrous hangover that was even worse than he remembered. Rita typed out the password on the door terminal, and the steel curtain rolled up with a rattle. The lights had been turned off, but as Rita cocked her head, they flicked back on.

“Surpriiiise!” chimed several tinny voices in unison.

Confetti drifted to the floor, and a banner reading “Welcome to your New Home!” hung from the ceiling.

“Oh, I forgot…” The griffon smiled around her beak, stepping into the room. “Sorry guys, false alarm. No new family member yet, but hey, you all get an A plus for effort!”

“Fuck this gay earth,” Tap droned, dragging his hooves to the bed and flopping onto his side.

>>31203
oh my gosh~

/)-o-(\

>>31203
That's great. Can't wait for the new chapters!
Actually I can :D

>>31205
>>31206
And in other news, you can get insanely close to making Double Tap in the official pony maker.

>>31208
that's awesome!

This fic sucks and you should feel bad!

>hurry the fuck up with the next chapter
>don't have any butterball pics for you, so take this

>>31224
When the elevator doors opened he put his plans on hold. Xenith was there, staring back at him.

She had one hoof raised and out of sight, he assumed to either hold some sort of weapon or to keep the doors open. Possibly both. The dyed zebra remained silent, her gaze unblinking.

“Uh…” he finally uttered, “I missed my stop.”

“And I am holding the door open for you.”

“Yeah, I see that… thanks.”

Hesitantly, Tap stepped inside, never once turning his back to her. The walls of the car felt like ice as he backed into a corner. Her eyes followed him every step of the way, and then she stepped away from the panel and into corner across from him.

“Do you not know what floor you reside on?”

“No! Yes. I mean— I think I’m uh…” He slid to the other corner and reached for the panel, waving his fetlock over the buttons. She moved to the opposite corner. “Oh, you know what? I forgot something at the market.”

Xenith narrowed her eyes as he made his selection. Tap put on a big, fake smile.

“You are not what you appear to be,” she stated.

His smile vanished. “Neither are you.”

>>31224
You crazy bastard, you've unleashed the might of the Omega Plot! We're doomed! Dooooooomed!

>>31225
Yesss. Keep 'em comin'.
>Says the guy over a month late on his newest chapter.

So, is Rita any good in combat? any specific skills? or does she have an exceptionally large amount of points in speech and can convince most anyone to do the fighting for her?

>>31244
Her stats from when she was conceptualized. This is still accurate give or take a point here and there.

And she is SHIT in any form of combat know to pony or griffon, she isn't even a very good strategist. But she's smart, knows how to talk, and doesn't really care about anyone except herself.

All that said, it still wouldn't be a good idea to get too close to her with hostile intent. She may not know how to fight, but she's got talons, claws, a beak, and mouth full of lion teeth and she's found that if she just flips the fucks out swiping around she'll probably cut SOMETHING important.

But yeah, when she needs to go into hostile territories she either relies on hired/manipulated help and/or good ol' robots.

She has a major lady boner for all things weaponry, but has YET to find one she can use with any effectiveness. She's loves to build, modify, and see guns in action but is quick to panic under fire.

She's a crap flier. She was actually a faster on the ground than in the air, but then she got badly shot in the leg and now has a bit of a limp.

She can be more than a little clumsy, but adrenaline does wonders for her when its time to run and hide. Also, gotta love them stealth thingy-dos.

Oh and she has a sex addiction. Her favorite is a dood pony, but anything will do in a pinch. Except a dood griffon, she doesn't want kids and BARBED DICKS ARE AWFUL.

Hobbies include learning anything she can about the ministry mares, weapons design, playing the guitar, mechanical engineering, singing, robotics, sex, computer programming, and writing fanfiction. She is not good at all these things, for instance only about half her weapons designs work and most that do aren't very safe and her singing voice has been compared to having ground glass jammed in your ears.

>>31246
Being a dude Griffon must suck.

I also really like the touch of finely ground glass- it's so smooth and has a lot less friction against your skin. Still wouldn't like it jammed in my ears though. That would be uniquely agonizing.

>>31249
Most other griffons don't complain, most actually enjoy it. Rita's just kinda weird.

Is it weird that I like putting links to what I feel is appropriate music into the chapters?

For a story set in a Fallout world, the soundtrack I attach is not very Fallout at all.

A lot of that stems from the way I imagine Anywhere being less a traditional action/role-playing game and more of a stealth/action game, like Splinter Cell or Metal Gear Solid, set in the world of Fallout: Equestria.

Which also makes the 'over the shoulder' style narration make more sense. I'm pretty sure there aren't any other FoE stories that narrate from the third person. But I could be (and probably am) wrong.

>>31293
i believe you are right about the third person thing. I always thought the first person was a tradition or something, and when i found out this one was in third person it blew my mind.I'm serious, I was like; Bwooosh, mind blown
as for music, you are more than welcome to pick what ever you want, it is your story. and at the end of the day i would still say any music is better than no music. except maybe dubstep.

btw

here is the part of the post where I say "Oh my gosh, hurry up and post the next chapter(s?) already! >:V"

Oh my gosh, hurry up and post the next chapter(s?) already! >:V

>>31293
I don't mind the music links in the story. I'm more of a purist when it comes to reading stories so I prefer few or no hyperlinks, but if executed well a piece of music can really help set up the scene, something that printed books can't do.
Besides, if I really don't like the music I can always close down the page playing it.

As for the choice of music, you shouldn't feel constrained to fallout-y music. It would get dull real fast. In the games the radio often sounds silly playing the tunes compared to the environment, which is probably why it's in there.

>>31294
Yaaaay I'm being original then. Beyond the change in tone due to Tap's playstyle I've also had a hard time writing first person narrations for some reason.

fuck the majority of dubstep

Chapter 5 is at 17 pages, and I still need to finish the warning shot scene and set up for chapter 6.

>>31297
Legit. I'm torn between reading in silence and reading with something playing in the background.

I didn't care much for the music in FO3, but I liked most of the music from NV and loved everything that played in Old World.

I did absolutely loved Agatha's station, though (also I turned down the Blackhawk because I felt she would need it more). Something similar may or may not show up.

>>31300
but we havent even gotten chapters 3 and 4 yet
;A;

>>31301
Back log while waiting for Odds 2.

>>31323
I know, I know. The upside to this is that once we're ready to resume, I'm going to be posting chapters very consistently until my backlog runs out. I'm working on chapter 6 at present.
__

“Good to see you again! What brings ya round these parts?”

“Hungry, same as always.” Smiles and nods were exchanged. “Emerald, did something happen here earlier?”

“Well, shoot, ya got me… we had a lil’ scrape with some bandits.” She flashed her smile again as Tap’s expression darkened. “Nothin’ we couldn’t handle, mind you!”

He nodded slowly. “Any losses?”

“Only a few on our side, but you know we always try an’ look on the bright side o’ things. We’ll be jus’ fine.”

“And did any of them survive?”

“Mmhmm, but we shouldn’t be havin’ no trouble from that lot in the days ahead.”

“Good,” he breathed.

“If you do, though,” Rita interrupted, suddenly at his side again, “you know we have a discount rate for bandits and raiders!”

“Ah remember! Don’tchu worry yer feathery lil’ noggin.” Rita giggled and bounded off again. Emerald returned her attention to Tap. “Might not need hired help much longer, though.”

He cocked a brow. “Oh yeah? You started training your guards better?”

“Naw, nothin’ like that. That Stable-Dweller an’ her friends stopped in right when we needed her! She’s really changin’ things ‘round these parts.”

Tap felt a jolt down his spine. He couldn’t decide if it was anxiety or excitement. “Really now…” His eye twitched as he feigned disinterest. “I hear she’s a pretty big deal. Nothing I haven’t heard of before, though. I don’t think she’ll be around much longer.”

“We’ll jus’ see, won’t we?” Emerald shrugged, laughing. “That DJ P0N3 sure loves to talk about her, though. Ah recon he’s got a crush on her.”

“Wouldn’t know. Not a fan. That Stable-Dweller say if she was coming back?”

“Well, Ah recon she would be, seein’ as we told her to come back fer dinner.”

He nodded and cleared his throat. “Anyway, gimmie something to eat, yeah?”

>>31327
Also, it's all my fault.

>>31327
>>31342
oh, I'm just poking fun. you have all the time in the world, there is no rush.

>>31342
Take your time. I know from experience trying to write a chapter of a few thousand words takes an age. that's before proofreading, re proof reading and getting a couple other people to read it and bounce ideas back (without those anything I write would be so bterribly horrendous it makes eyes bleed, as opposed to merely being bad).

So yeah, I can wait a few weeks for an update.

Just out of curiosity how are anywhere but here and odds and ends supposed to go together? Is it always going to be leapfrogging between the two due to spoilers in each story or will they diverge?

If it's the former it could be veeery interesting but the stories should probably come with a disclaimer that you should read them simultaneously chapter for chapter.

>>31767
isnt odds and ends like 4 years before anywhere but here or something?
i would imagine they should be treated like separate stories with the same character.

>>31769
well they're holding off anywhere but here so odds and ends can catch up because there are spoilers for odds and ends (as far as I'm aware). So I'm wondering if they're designed to dovetail, despite being years apart.

>>31773
havent heard about that. this place is pretty much the only place i get my fanfiction updates.

Whoa whoa whoa. Setting the record straight time.

They don't spoil each other at all really.

The only thing that's spoiled is you know that neither of them will die before Odds is over, since they're both alive in Anywhere.

There are some things that are set up in Odds, but show up in Anywhere with their own introduction. For example, in Chapter 1 Tap shudders as he recalls what he had to go through to get Rita's nail polish. This in and of itself is a funny joke, but it it will also be covered in a much later adventure in Odds. So if you read Anywhere first, when they start their adventure for Nail Polish you'll be all, "THIS GONNA BE GOOD" and if you read Odds first then when he mentions the nailpolish, you'll be all "Oh yeah, that was NUTS!"

The only reason Stonershy is waiting to post 3 and 4 and 5 is because he wanted to be surprised by what happened in Odds Chapter 2 and waited until I was done so he could have Tap talk about how he and Rita met in 3 of Anywhere.

TL;DR reading them in either order or simultaneously will still provide a coherent and amusing experience.

As for updating, it'll be a bit of a back and forth in no specific pattern. And they'll be SO much faster once Odds 2 is ready to rock. I'm sorry to say it looks to clock in close to 40 pages and that will most likely be THE longest single chapter in either Odds or Anywhere.

>>31803
>The longest single chapter in either Odds or Anywhere so far.

I'm trying to keep every chapter of Anywhere under or around 20 pages, but I'm fighting a losing battle. No 50 or 100 page chapters though, I promise.

>>31773
Basically what Pacce said. There's stuff in chapters 3 and 4 that I guess work fine without context, but make a lot more sense if you read 2 of Odds first.

Another upside to waiting is that I'm able to alter the chapters freely without having to worry about upsetting readers with retconning. This has been beneficial no less than ten times as of now. Ultimately, the story is a lot better now that I've had time to give it some serious preening before shoving it out of the nest /bird_metaphor

>>31817
Couldn't you break the long chapters into sub chapters and just have more chapters?
I really don't mind big updates, means it's more I get get my teeth into but just for the sake of future readers who get daunted by the loads of huge chapters (I never really got that- if something comes highly reccomended then I'll read it. If I think it's good I'll keep reading it regardless of how big, just means I get longer to enjoy it imo. the trick is to keep it interesting all that time).

Also, writing a lot and then preeinging the story before release is a really good idea, it also allows for a refular release pattern. the only problem is if people come up with a great idea in the reviews your course is entirely fixed, but in the most part that's outweighed by the former points.

>>31831
It's not so much reviewers that give us ideas. It's each other, back and forth.

But yeah, what you said about breaking up chapters, that was the original idea, but sometimes it just doesn't work out. Like I COULD break Odds 2 into 2 and 3, but I don't see a good dramatic place to crack without killing the pacing.

That said, the little... images in each chapter; you can use those to book mark your place so you can come back.

Just do a search for:
Anywhere: |[ to bring you to the next Slot Machine.
Odds: --[ to bring you to the nearest Battery.

So I just posted chapter 3 of Anywhere but Here.

Enjoy!
http://www.fimfiction.net/chapter/81102

>>32141
outstanding.

Bad Tap! forgetting someone's birthday. Bad. Now who's birthday was it?

loved the splinter cell music, tempo helped me with the pacing of the actions.

Tap. planning out what you are going to do and what will is nice and all. but when shit hits the fan, there are a lot more elements in play. and when I say a lot I mean it like how Rita meant it when describing how many hell hounds there were in relation to how many there actually were.

I didn't think a tank could be made remotely automated. Rita must be one hell of an engineer to just be able to whip that up on the fly.

I wonder if we'll see Miss zipped-up-vest hound again.

>>32142
Actually there have existed unmanned, remote operated tanks since the 1930s.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Teletank

And that's just boring old human world. Who can say what mad things were made in a world where magic and science were parallel and intersecting fields of study.

Also Tap forgot his girlfriend's birthday.

That was a great chapter with plenty of action. Gotta say though the multiple times Tap died was really confusing until I read the comments.

>>32142
You'll find out whose birthday soon enough, and Rita is the best at what she does. As for that hellhound, well, only time can tell.

>>32149
I can understand that, I guess. Think of it like reloading a save, basically.

>>32153
Yeah I was wondering if Tap was essentially save scumming there.

Time for a slightly maybe better review.

It is slightly creepy to have Pahrita be taking a hit on one of her favourite things. That's one of the things that scares me about her.
Tap's obsession with ass (in particular Alicorn ass. The bit about the giant Alicorn made me chuckle. would be interesting to see if they do meet an alicorn) is always amusing, being the first thing he snaps his attention to.
Tap has a giiiiirlfriiieeennnd will be nice to see who/what she is later on. Same with Tap's past with the alicorns which keeps cropping up.

Always good to see Tap's repitoire of spells for relative stealth.
In case anyone was wondering, counter vibrations to dampen noise of running, if used properly, would also cancel out vibrations into the ground, see destructive and constructive interference.

Couldn't help but balk at Tap's equipment list.
That's a lot of explosives. Couldn't help remembering a scene from Ice Base where two people were caught between three grenades, two 30 feet away in one direction and the third in the opposite end. Everyone in between gets brutally shredded to pieces. Was kinda wondering what Tap was going to do with THREE DOZEN explosives- try and demolish a few of the buildings?

Then they see the tank- I had a vision of awesome and then everything started to go wrong. As I said before, they multiple deaths were a little confusing but it made things more interesting in how many different times he could die. I didn't get the pattern of pagebreaks though- I assume there's some kind of pattern.
I'm also suprised for none of the deaths a las round punched through into one of his bags and cooked off the explosives he was carrying, destroying the whole building and/or killing everyhting in the street.

Lots of confused street fighting and some weird monsterpony spawn thing (that was certainly different). Good solid action.

the part where he wallclimb jumped was a little bit crazy. not sure how he could dump all of his gear in the process, but it made for some epic imagined stuff, mostly in slow-mo as everything falls away towards the angry mob of hellhounds.
then obviously a pretty big explosion which knocks through a few brick walls and fills the air with tens of thousands of razor sharp bits of shrapnel.

Then tank fun. Playing around with tanks is always fun. Wouldn't be suprised if by some cosmic fluke the thing looks like a Centurion. That tank got into so many wars over so much time it's probably achieved dimension hopping abilities by now.

Looking forwards to the next one- assuming we might meet the alicorns unless they're going to skip it and run for Manehattan again. Also that Hellhound had way too much description to be never mentioned again. She kinda seemed like a cross between a hellhound and one of PH's Sand dogs (the dogs which didn't go back to the tunnels filled with mutagens).

Keep up the good work!

>>32179
Rita is a complete sociopath. That's really all there is to say. That, and Tap likes butts. The Super Alicorn thing will be showing up in Odds and Ends. You won't get to meet his giiiiiirlfriend until chapter 6.

Fun fact, Tap does not have 100 in guns. He does have 100 in explosives, though. As you saw, he likes setting traps to draw attention away from his position. Carrying explosives in volume is essential for that.

I hadn't thought of his grenades going off as a possible death scenario, but goddamn that's a good one.

So in this chapter, you get a taste of Lady Luck dealing criticals. It's not pretty. He appreciates the help, but she kind of terrifies him.

Tap has pretty high agility and travels light. The drugs help, too. His combat style centers around superior maneuverability and evasion. He can also put it to use in the form of pony parkour.

I imagined the tank to look more like an M1 Abrams, actually.

Maaaaaybe we'll see that hellhound again. Maybe.

And thank you very much! I'll try!

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45014/2/Anywhere-But-Here%3A-Odds-and-Ends/Good-Help-is-Hard-to-Find%3A-Part-2

Featuring:
Giant bugs!
Heated philosophical discussion!
A hidden tribe!
Smoldering lust in a dilapidated hotel!
And a historic first meeting!

>>32394
Woo! I've been waiting for this one a while.
Returning to the adventures of the dynamic duo and their adventures across the wastelend!

I really like Pahrita. She may be a total sociopath but she's so bubbly and random. The encounter with the Radscorpions and the snorkeloscope is a perfect example.

Pahrita's advances and his stoic determination to the contrary is also a very enjoyable dynamic in this chapter.
Six hours of being talked at about the Ministry MAres, oh wow. I wonder if she's just that enthusiastic with Tap, or whether she's mellowed to mere minutes?

The pihranas are interesting. A little barbaric in their practices but not bad, especially since it's mainly to protect their farms etc. their practices of eating dead ponies is a lot better than Arbu, since they don't kill people just to eat them, so it goes from being horrendously evil to merely incredibly stupid (there are a lot of reasons why cannibalism in a long lived species is a really bad idea as far as health is concerned).

Not much to say about the Rita Sexy time, except that she has some kinks I would never have dreamed of.
Also, I reckon a lot of people's curiosity will be satiated about the bomb collar.

A few more raiders than before? Well taking out thirty raiders should be a challenge, unless they want to go in sneaky.

Then The Iron Stag goes nuts. I kinda saw it coming- what he does is way too much to remain entirely sane as well. Although it is kinda funny I compared him to Kharn the betrayer and here he is, well, betraying in gory fashion.

Rita's arguments with him were great. I agreed with most of them. In addition, Rita's inclusion of an insurance policy in the Stag's sniper was genius.

the rest of the fight was pretty viscreal and brutal, the stag just wouldn't die. But, with those kinds of injuries I wouldn't put him to last long...

The Piranha scavenger was making his way back towards the camp along one of his well travelled paths when his hoof kicked some brass bullet casings, distracting him. These were fresh, unusual. Instinctively he paused, looking for anything of worth left behind at the scene of a recent battle.
A faint moaning reached his ears, carried on the wind. Intrigued, the scavenger followed the noise to a cave entrance barely larger than a pony...

I think I recognise that last scene form somewhere :-p but with less random blackouts. the image of Tap chewing on Rita's tail made me chuckle a lot. I have to admit I'm a little suprised at how quickly Tap met Rita, I thought for a while it would be Rita's adventures on her own for a while. BUT, it'll be good to see the dynamics in anywhere but here start to form. Since they've had four years to get used to each other I'm expecting things to be wild initially.

Also Tap's going to have his work cut out at the resteraunt.

In short, another really good chapter, looking forwards to more.

So first off, I posted a deleted scene here:
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/79334

It goes more into Piranhas and their culture. It's funny, but slowed down the pacing, so I cut it.

Now to address my legions of fan.
>>32414
When I made this chapter, I figured if this didn't make people not like Rita, nothing would. Turns out nothing will make you stop loving that bag of evil and cute.

In the four years following this, she has learned and made up so many more things about the MM's that she probably actually talks about them more now. Tap is just dulled to it. Most of the time.

The Piranhas were a fun bit of world-building for me. I wanted to make a different kind of pony civilization that wasn't struggling settlers or super-crazy raiders who decorate ceilings with kittens. And they vary their diet with other things besides pony and they cook their ponies VERY well to avoid disease and visit their village doctor regularly.

Stag learned long ago to disregard females and acquire currency. Which is probably why he's so grouchy.

As for Rita's Sexy McFun times, Rita's main fetish is simply information. She wants to see what happens when she touches her or pokes there, she needs to see their faces and hear the sounds and there's always more to learn through experimentation.

One thing to remember about the raider number is he very much doesn't have enough bullets for that many. He started with 24 bullets and fired at least 3 before getting there. Even if every shot was a kill shot, he'd have around a dozen or so more angry angry raiders to go through.

Not that it matters because he's decided the whole thing's a trap and that Rita is evil and must die. I think it's a little unfair to say he went NUTS so much as she just ended up on shit list and all that which it implies. There's a lot of ambiguity in here, but I feel that Flint was a hero with a lot of darkness in his heart and head and he tried to use that to help folks.

Yeah, his attack on Rita was pre-emptive to say the least, but she is a character who would and will and has done harm/had harm done to innocent people just to get what she wants. But hey, she's the main character and he's not so tough fig nuts for him. Good thing NO ONE COULD SURVIVE THAT. tm.

Don't worry, you'll get to see more Pre-Tap adventures with Rita later. It's just that they're a comedy duo and work best together.

Glad you enjoyed it. Look forward to even more dark Wasteland wildness in the future.

Anywhere Chapter 4 is up!

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/22731/4/Fallout%3A-Equestria---Anywhere-but-Here/Chapter-4---Technical-Difficulties

this is awesome. two chapters that I need to read.
now if only i had the time to read them :/

>>32572
Reading. going to give feedback later, goingh to be busy tonight.

Right away, I could tell something had been killed in there not too long before we arrived. There wasn’t a body oh you tease you.

>>32584
No rush duder. I'm keeping the chapters to 20 pages maximum so don't worry about getting avalanched.

>>32586
This is why we had the delay. Odds 2 and Anywhere 3 and 4 are directly related.

Quick questions:
How would Rita or Tap react to the others untimely demise?
Do Rita or Tap have any fears or phobias?
Would anyone happen to know if Littlepip has any fears or phobias?
And if not could some ask okay for me?(I don't know how to work on an IRC or whatever.)
Expediency would be very much appreciated

>>32718
She has a fear of heights thanks to living in underground. She also suffers from cave adaptation a bit but not to the extremity in Dorf Fort. Where you can place guards right outside the caves and they vomit none stop for 2 years straight.

>>32718

On the subject of demise:
Rita would sigh, shrug, and hire someone new. She might eat Tap if it's an apropriate situation. Tap, on the other hand, would take Rita's death pretty hard. He'd likely take all his caps and move somewhere that he wouldn't be bothered, and spend his days drinking or drugged. It would take a lot to bring him back into the world.

As far as phobias are concerned:
Tap has a lot of survivor's guilt and abandonment issues. You could say that he fears losing anyone close to him. Also Lady Luck. Rita is afraid of anything that's not a horse dick and Littlepip is afraid of horse dicks.

Some of this stuff we're going to actually cover in story, so we're not going into super detail here.

>>32720
>>32721
many, many thanks.
>>32720
Figured it would be something like that but I wasn't entirely certain. Again, many thanks.
>>32721
Awww, was kinda hoping Rita would be a little more compassionate. I guess Tap makes up for it.
so that brings up the next question.

If Tap saw Rita get horribly murdered right in front of his eyes, would he seek immediate revenge?

as for the phobias, Tap's makes it really hard to work with for me.
As for Rita's, was her mother was a chicken and her father a scaredy cat? Get it? Cause she's a gryphon. half lion, half eagle. (hahahahahaha *gets shot for telling a bad joke*) But in all seriousness, because of the information given earlier, this is no longer required, and neither is Littlepip's fear of a phallus(was looking for a more serious fear).

as for the limited information you have given, I understand. I was not looking for spoilers of chapters to come, I was merely digging for information for my own means. I'll explain it in the spoiler tagged paragraph below.

Spoilers Ahoy!

Though I doubt most anyone would give a shit and a half, the reason I asked those questions is because I am going to try my hands at writing a fanfic. more specifically, a Halloween fanfic of Fallout Equestria. That's why I requested expediency since it is right around the corner. I'm going to try and work on it to get it spit out by Wednesday(Halloween)but if not, I'll at least try to get it by the end of the week or something(that counts for something... right?)
I'm more than positive it will be a total piece of crap, filled with vomit, and glazed in ichor, but I'll try to make it decent enough so no one will want to give themselves a screwdriver-lobotomy after reading the opening. That is, of course, if anyone decides to even bother to read it.
the reason I bring up the untimely death is because I guess I'm going to have to kill Rita. Don't get me wrong, it's not that I dislike her or the story or anything(far from it), it's just that it is going to be a driving factor for Tap, assuming his reaction is "I'm going to kill that bastard if it's the last thing I do!" to her death, or something similar. And she wont be the only one meeting a gruesome end.
And it's not only your story that I'm going to be borrowing the characters from, it's also Project Horizon and Fallout Equestria(which is why I asked about Littlepip's phobias)
If you would like more detail I will be more than happy to give more, though I'm not going to spoil the entire story(unless I decide it's not worth the effort because no one is going to read it and I would only be writing it to give myself busy work and feign that my skills are worth my existence, though most anyone else's are infinitely greater than mine.)
And again, many thanks.

>>32725
Interesting...

I'll check it out. To answer your question regarding Tap's response to Rita getting offed, imagine punching a bull in the nose, and its reaction to said punching. This is comparable, except that Tap has mastery of knives and explosives. Hopefully that is adequate.

>>32727
so... yes to "I want revenge"?
with what he's and the others are dealing with, I'm sure it will play more than an important enough role.

one more question(and hopefully the last)

would Tap be willing to put aside the hit on littlepip if there was an even bigger threat traipsing around the place(keep in mind that this threat is the one who will be killing Rita, among many others, and that Littlepip will be seeking similar vengeance on)?

So for fun I wrote the other side of the encounter at the end of chapter 4.

http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/81963

>>32730
In the name of revenge, that would probably take priority.

Wow, don't I feel bad.
Might as well hand this off to someone else with all the information(or lack there of) I have.

I would like to apologize for using this thread for this and I would like to thank you for letting me post here about this so far. I know it is terribly off-topic, but I feel I shouldn't make a whole new thread with out actually having some content.
Again, sorry and thank you.

More questions! (sorry!)

would anyone happen to know if any megaspells were targeted to the Everfree Forest, or if it was relatively untouched, save for radiation and taint bleeding into it from the surrounding environment?

spoilered because spoilers, but still a question that needs to be answered.
Would Rita's bomb collar not mix well with fire? not like "oh a match stick is getting too close" I mean a hyper active magical napalm engulfing the entirety of her shoulders and up, as well as her claws, burning away most all of her flesh and leaving her bones (PS, that is how Rita kicks the bucket in this(again, sorry)), or would it just kinda melt or something.(basically asking if the collar is still live or something, I don't know how bomb collars work, sorry)

just don't want to write anything wrong. sorry for being cautious. I'm not going to be able to post it in time(tomorrow) but I hope a belated story is all right.
It's probably more than likely how I write the characters will make them out of character, But I'll try my best.

>>32812
It's cool dude. I use the PH thread like a FoE general thread, so it's okay if you do the same with mine.

Her bomb collar doesn't have any explosives in it. It's just a collar that she likes because of the pretty lights.

That would pretty much send Tap into a blood rage, though.

>>32814

Many thanks, sorry for causing you to spoil that(if it is a spoiler).
so, so, sorry.

Good. Rage is good. He's going to need it when he teams up with Littlepip and Blackjack to kill the Headless, Man-less Horse(Headless Horse) and his Pumpkin minions

went to the wiki everfree wasnt bombed, but I think it's "not expossed to radiation" bit is kinda wrong, considering it's mutated flora and fauna.

>>32817
Hah, you're having fun with this! Good luck duder~

>>32812
Oh, Roast Rita. Yum.

>>32819
a little too well done for my taste.
still, sorry
wait 'til the ending

>>32817
The everfree forest wasn't bombed, there was a piece of starmetal/cosmic horror/starship reactor fragment/whatever caused all the mutant fauna and flora.

>>32586
Better late than never, right?

The intro- still can't wait to find out who the other girl is, whether it's Tap's giiiirlfried (who now has a name, potentially- Skimmer), or not, time will tell.
Now, since Odds dealing with this part isn't out yet I'm tapdancing on thin ice here, but unless the fight with the raiders is skimmed over I think there's way too much detail in here and it might spoil odds a bit to read through since you now know, blow by blow how the fight is going to pan out. Also since it happened years ago and Tap's no doubt gotten into a lot if fights in the interim I would be suprised if he could recall events with that much clarity.
Sexy time with Rita was left vague enough not to spoil it though.
Comaring the fight scene to the bar, Tap was blitzed out of his skull and forgot about half of what went on, so there was a lot of new stuff to plug the gaps in his memory, wheras with this fight I can't see that.

Sorry for going on and on, but that's my primary critisism of the chapter.

Onto the main meat of the story the on road interrupted coitus was hilarious and the following fight was pretty good. But their tank- Noooooo. I feel Rita's pain.

Still being chased by the Hellhond, that's cool. so is the nod to whereabouts the main story is with the rangers killing each other.

I'd also forgotten about the robots sent out to find stuff. glad they mainly got back in one piece.
Freezer corpse. Well, that's not creepy at all...
Not much to say about the clop, but it's going in the good clop pile.

The robot 'funeral' was odd, but totally in keeping from what I've come to expect from Rita. Had to rewatch the end of Khan after reading that.

The link to the music HQ infiltration is linked three times- it's a bit confusing since I figured they'd be different and one would lead to the next.

The names for the hellhound were amusing. Fuckles :D
That is a sneaky way of getting ammo into the tower. Guess there's no chance of having Rita simply flying in through their room's window with a stealthbuck on, then have her fly out equally cloaked and go in the front door the legitimate way?

The chat with 'Pip was confusing until Pacce added in the part from her perspective. to me it all sounded vaguely threataning like she was onto them and I couldn't work out what other meaning she could have had for some of the stuff, especially the last one and how she heard of Rita. So yeah, that extra bit cleared things up a lot. It's a good scene there with Tap going into a blind panic and 'Pip getting totally the wrong signals.
It was probably a good thing Tap didn't try to wound her because even totally drunk she could probably smash him to paste with her freaky telekenisis by accident.

AAAND that brings us to the end of the chapter. In short, another great one, looking forwards to more.

>>32812
This halloween story looks like it's going to go completely off the rails. That might not be such a bad thing...

>>32842
Odds 3 will not terribly deal with what Tap did with the raiders, since as you say, its been covered. It's mainly going to focus on the scouting of the area and then when Tap strikes, it'll be Rita's reaction, leading into the actual uncovery of the treasure with a lot more Rita freaking out. And yes, I will go into detail of Rita and Tap's first sexy fun time.

Glad you enjoyed the chapter, the Pip thing was supposed to be ambiguous for Tap but I think we took for granted that the audience wouldn't think we're trying to twist the story of Littlepip around our two bad hombres. It would have been more cleared up in the next chapter of Anywhere, but I felt like writing something anyway.

Odds 3 is running behind, by the way. I got a major hit of emotional problems and I don't have any medication. Working through it, next weekend most likely.

In the mean time, I hope that guy's balls nasty and crazy tale comes out soon. And you can also enjoy this:
http://anywhere-butt-here.tumblr.com/

first off I would like to apologize once more for using this thread for updating my personal things no one cares, but i dont really have anywhere else to say it where anyone would even be slightly interested in what I have to say.

So writing the Halloween story is chugging along as fast as the sailing stones of the devil's racetrack. not to say it's not moving along. I spend all day thinking about how to write it, what to write, the whole shabang. It's just that I havent had the time to write it, But i am going to write it. I want to write it so I will write it.
I just have been put on twelves and I have very little time for me and in turn this project. I also need to catch up on these stories.

>>33493
Best advice I can give:
Dump it out sloppy and then clean it up after.
Looking forward to reading it.

>>33494
That's pretty good advice there. I'm tempted to start writing my own FoE story, but I'm kinda worried that the entire faction it's based around will turn into a giant Mary sue.
Essentially it's the pegasi living in the sky in the northern reaches of Equestria and some very limited ground holdings in the frozen north or islands that weren't melted to slag. These ponies didn't break away from Equestria like their southern cousins but instead started calling themselves the Commonwealth. They're not huge but with access to the mineral rich (and radiation free) tundra they don’t have such a squeeze on raw materials so they maintain a very technology base and trade this technology and material with the Enclave for food from the SPP.
They essentially get dragged into the war with Red Eye because he threatens their principle food supply, but when Littlepip clears the sky she inadvertently dooms them all. There may or may not be a slightly sinister plot to unite the world in peace and harmony by replacing the influential people around Equestria with androids programmed to be subtly pro-Commonwealth Sorry for causing clutter. that will be my first and last post on the matter.

On a more related note, I'm really enjoying the tumblr. Rita's rebuke in particular to the criticism of word domination had me in stitches.

>>33524
I think I remember reading that idea in the PH thread. It could maybe use a little tweaking, but the core concept isn't implausible.

Not criticizing you personally, but I don't understand why everyone likes writing pegasi centered stories.

>>32842
And to you, good sir!

You'll find out about his girlfriend soon enough. Patience.

I'm pretty sure Pacce is going to focus on completely different things with chapter 3 of Odds, so you won't be getting a total rehash of the same material even though it follows the same sequence of events. Rita prioritizes things much differently than Tap, after all.

You'll see the tank again, in one form or another. Never fear. Freezer corpse will also make more sense eventually as well. Now, funny thing about that robot funeral. It's kind of a parody of another funeral. We weren't sure if people would pick up on that.

Fixed the link to the music, and the names for the hellhound were all references to a flash animation that I love. She could probably do that, but it would likely be a lot more time consuming. That would be how they get larger things in and out of the tower, though.

People got mad about the Pip thing and we were like BUHHHH COME ON. It's supposed to seem like she knows. It's also supposed to be funny that it seems like she knows, but I guess we counted too much on our audience knowing that we're not retarded and trusting us to do our thing. Personally, I'm a little worried how people will react to 5 and 6 based on the love it or hate it reception of chapter 4.

Anyway, sorry it took me so long to respond. Won't keep you waiting on the next chapters toooo much longer.

>>33532
Both the people you're replying to are the same person. Comes with the territory of being A. Nonymous I guess.

The story is completely in pre-alpha at the moment, I've just been dreaming up some crazy ideas and bouncing them off my brother. Most likely it'll end up as a romp through Wacky Wasteland.
Admittedly I've only read a dozen FoE side stories but the vast majority were unicorns. It's partially out of convenience I guess- instead of spending weeks hoofing it all over the country on foot they can merely spend days flying- also wing hands as much as I would like to avoid them, make it easier than Earth Ponies.

On a broader note (and pure speculation ahead), a lot of people would dearly love to be able to fly and probably use pegasi stories to explore that fantasy, since nothing irl can really come close bar throwing yourself out of a plane (something I've done a few times- in freefall once you hit terminal velocity you do feel like you're just flying and have remarkable control over which direction you go in) and even then you can't exactly climb like a bird can.



I must also be really not well versed in my pop culture because everything went straight over my head.
I personally didn't get mad over the 'Pip thing but I did get confused. I think it's a case there of trying to strike a balance between being subtle and trying to bludgeon something into the reader's comprehension.
I think in this case there weren't enough cues to signal what exactly was going on.
Yes, it is pretty hilarious with Tap's reaction once what's actually going on gets twigged.
Admittedly though, I think what you were trying to do there is probably one of the hardest things possible in literature. I wouldn't have a clue where to begin trying to play out a scene like that, so you get serious props for trying.

Finally, don't worry about the time taken to respond and don't worry about rushing out the next chapter- it took me, what a week to get around to responding to the chapter and I have a lot of patience for the next one (especially now there's S3 to distract me).

On a broader note (and pure speculation ahead), a lot of people would dearly love to be able to fly and probably use pegasi stories to explore that fantasy, since nothing irl can really come close bar throwing yourself out of a plane (something I've done a few times- in freefall once you hit terminal velocity you do feel like you're just flying and have remarkable control over which direction you go in) and even then you can't exactly climb like a bird can.



I must also be really not well versed in my pop culture because everything went straight over my head.
I personally didn't get mad over the 'Pip thing but I did get confused. I think it's a case there of trying to strike a balance between being subtle and trying to bludgeon something into the reader's comprehension.
I think in this case there weren't enough cues to signal what exactly was going on.
Yes, it is pretty hilarious with Tap's reaction once what's actually going on gets twigged.
Admittedly though, I think what you were trying to do there is probably one of the hardest things possible in literature. I wouldn't have a clue where to begin trying to play out a scene like that, so you get serious props for trying.

Finally, don't worry about the time taken to respond and don't worry about rushing out the next chapter- it took me, what a week to get around to responding to the chapter and I have a lot of patience for the next one (especially now there's S3 to distract me).

>>33535
Also I never figured that the two different stories would be focusing on Tap OR Rita so different things come to prominence. That's pretty ace actually.

Well, I guess pegasi centred stories ARE a lot more common than I thought. There are loads of them. Even Murky number seven, one in the 'big five' list I found (anywhere squeezes in just out of the top 5 aparrently), has a pegasus for a protagonist. Probably doesn't count as much since he can't use his wings, but still..

>>34185
I know of that list.
Anywhere will destroy it.
There will no longer be a top 5 list, just a headline. And that headline will be: Anywhere But Here.

>>34185
I think the only side story I've actually read is A Cut Above, which is pretty damn good so far. It's obscure as all hell, of course.

>>34194
Well I'll have to add it to the list. I'll be spending the weekend reading :D

>>34186
Today, some comics, tomorrow the list, next week the world!
MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

Been looking at the tumblr. It's still hilarious. I asked about any job too big. The comic strip was fantastic. 'Cerberus can't be killed, we're also keeping your deposit' :D

Also with the latest one. Just ow. That's going to sting when stuff goes down in arbu

>>34214
dat foreshadowing

>>34214
>>34215
>implying Tap won't be able to kill Littlepip.

Have some faith, guys! He's a professional!

>>34260
But think of the feels, the feels!

getting too quite over here.
what's all this i hear about being locked in a box and buried alive?

>>34547
Fanart mostly!

I'm working on Blood while Pacce works on Odds chapter 3. Possibly posting 5 soon?

Here is a little something to tide you over for now (I hope)


You've been getting weird looks from Tenpony residents every step of the way through the tower, and when this little griffon sauntered up to you and asked to go someplace private, you jumped at the chance. You kind of remember her name, but not really.

She giggles drunkenly as she opens the door to her room, looking over her haunches at you and flicking her tail. She wiggles her ass at you before stepping through the door, almost falling over in the process.

There's another pony in the room; a unicorn that looks like he lost a fight with a meat grinder and somehow survived. He narrows his eyes as he locks eyes with you, looking you over from top to bottom.

"That's real fucked up, Rita." He looks away from you, but waves a hoof in your direction as he addresses the griffon. "Is this about the last time I brought Offal up here? I already told you I would only fuck her at her place from now on."

"Oh puh-lease," she slurrs. "I saw this guy and it was just too good to pass up. Ill be lucky if I ever see another one again in my whole life!" She grins back at you, waggling her brows. "I mean just look at him!"

The unicorn snorts and starts trotting toward you. "You're both fucking disgusting, and I'm getting the fuck outta here. Have fun or whatever." He shoves you out of the way as he passes by, slamming the door behind him.

"Sheeeeesh, what a grouch, huh? You'd think he'd be more open minded. Oh well, that just means I have you all..." She turns, putting her claws on your hips. "To..." She undoes the button of your pants with her beak. "My..." The zipper follows, a hot breath rolling across the head of your cock. She glances back up at you, her eyes wide, her wings unfolding to their full span. "Oooooh, this is gonna be fun!"

There's a moment of hesitation on your part. She has a beak, and it doesn't look to be the dullest or softest part of her body. Before you can get a word in, she stuffs your whole dick in the corner of her mouth.

To your relief, her beak seems to give way to actual lips on the sides. She cradles you there, sucking gently, the feathers of her face tickling just a bit. You realize a moment later that she's leering up at you.

Her claws give a little tug, and your pants slide the rest of the way down. Again, there's a hint of worry in your excitement as she brings her painted talons to your balls. She traces little circles with the tips as she continues to suck, narrowing her eyes.

You can feel her grinning, as if she's confirming that, yes, she knows that she's just a sharp jab away from seriously injuring you.

That jab never comes, though. She just keeps tickling and teasing, keeping you rock hard as she works along your shaft. Her tongue practically coils around it, clumsily jerking you off while she keeps the pressure on.

You can feel her throat rolling against the tip of your cock. When she moans, the vibrations run straight down your shaft, and you very nearly blow your load. She arches her brow and lifts a single talon, waving it back and forth.

Without warning, she opens her beak wide and switches to the other side of her mouth. The sharp tips of her beak skim your cock in the process, tingling more than they sting. You can't be sure if she's just trying to tease you or not, but she's made it pretty clear that she's not going to hurt you unless she wants to.

A bit of saliva rolls along the few inches of cock that she hasn't managed to fit inside her mouth. She slurps loudly, a little shiver running through her and causing her feathers to fluff up in a single wave.

Your cock feels like it's about to explode. She narrows her eyes again, some of the pressure dissipating as the corners of her mouth curls into a grin.

She mumbles something, putting a single talon between your balls and slowly lifting. You're already past the point of no return. You go completely rigid as you paint the back of her throat, and she gulps down every last drop of it.

When she's nursed you completely dry, she lets you go. She gives you a flick, giggling as your cock bobs and sways "Oh yeah, this was a good call. You ready for round two?"

>>34551
And round two!


You nod. For a girl like this, you can definitely manage another round. She claps her claws together, prancing a little on her hind legs. And then she tumbles onto her back, her wings spread out to either side of her. From there, she just starts laughing, running her claws through the plumage of her breast.

You stand there for a moment, not totally sure how to proceed. She lifts her head and cocks a brow at you. "What are you waiting for? A written invitation?" She spreads her hind legs a little wider, tail swishing along the ground, beckoning you closer.

That's all the encouragement you need. You drop to your knees and lean over her, carefully putting your palms to the floor so that you're not on her wings. She smiles, takes your wrists, and moves your hands until you're pinning her wings to the floor.

"Bigger boys than you have yet to break me in half." There's a glint of wildness in her eyes as she whispers, "Don't hold back."

She's already dripping wet when you spread the lips of her cunt with your cock, pushing it in nice and slow. It's not too tight, but it's not too loose either.

She gives a few squeezes and breathy groans as you work your length into her, pushing deeper until your pelvis meets the soft, fuzzy warmth of her haunches.

Her teats stand out against the silky curve of her belly, and you let go of one of her wings to give them a few experimental caresses.

Now that you know how deep you can go, it's time to get to work. You slide almost all the way out, keeping her open with just your head. She clicks her beak a little, brow furrowing as another shiver runs through her. "Come on," she whispers. "Give me everything you've got."

You’ve kept her waiting long enough. You plow into her like a rail spike, the meat of her haunches cushioning your hips. She lets out a long, rolling trill of a moan, digging her claws into the carpet on either side of her.

You pick up the pace, pulling back and thrusting in a bit more swiftly. Her back arches as you build up a rhythm, slapping softly against her each time you drive into her warm, sticky depths.

She gasps quietly between breathy, unintelligible sounds. As she locks eyes with you, you let your hand wander again. Your fingers comb through the short, silky fur of her feline half, tweaking and tugging on the parallel rows of nipples that run along her underside.

She glances down at your hand, and you hesitate. The griffon giggles lewdly, taking your wrist in her claw and directing it further up, over her breast. The soft plumage of her neck tickles your palm. She lets your hand settle there, then wraps her claw around it and squeezes.

You ask if she wants you to choke her, and she nods enthusiastically. You slow down as you express your concerns, but she just rolls her eyes and grabs your hip with her other claw. “Do you know how hard it is to find a partner with fingers and opposable thumbs out there?! You’ve got ‘em, so use ‘em!”

She did say not to hold back. You take a deep breath and hope for the best. As soon as you start to squeeze, she lets out a gargled moan of approval. She grips your hand tighter, and you apply more pressure.

The results show almost immediately through her performance. She starts choking out all sorts of swoons and chirps, rolling her hips against you all the while. Her eyes lid and her beak parts, but she keeps her claw on your hand, wordlessly insisting that you continue.

You feel something dusting down your back. A quick glance reveals it to be her tail, the bristly tuft like a dry paintbrush. Her claw slides up your side, the tips of her talons tracing over your back.

Her pussy starts to squeeze in a rolling motion, tightening in waves, bringing you closer and closer to climax. Her wings flutter against the ground, the muscles tensing in the wing you’re still pinning.

This is the final stretch. She pulls you in closer, your chest pressed to hers as she breathes fitfully. Her whole body trembles when she cries out, soft and shrill at the same time. You feel her convulse around your cock, building toward the crescendo.

She clenches once, twice, and then tosses her head back as her pussy goes into relentless spasms, milking you for everything you’re worth. You explode into the frothing sea between her haunches, and ride out the apex with her.

Only when you’re completely drained and her hips have stopped mirroring your motions does she release your hand from her throat. There are bright red claw marks in your flesh, some of which appear to be bleeding, but you ignore it for now. She almost seems to deflate, heaving a happy sigh as she rests her head on the floor. You pull yourself out of her and flop to the side, panting as you lay next to her.


This is all non-canon, of course.

Yeehaw! Birdkitty sex :D enjoyed the heck out of it!

>>34562
Daww, thanks~

>>34551
>>34552This anon thanks you from the bottom of his black heart.

The tumblr is still going really nicely. Since I don't have a tumblr account I'll just leave feedback here. Rita and Tap to mundane jobs too, although the wasteland being what it is I guess it can't be as straightforward as normal. The cat didn't look too happy to see Tap though.

Rita's expression with the cap eyes is priceless in the latest picture. Trust Rita with the caps :P
As to site layout, I don't know what's changed, but it looks good to me.

>>34773
I changed how the comics post from now on. I make each panel of the comics their own separate picture so they can be viewed on the Tumblr dashboard.

It really helps out some lazy lazy people.

Glad you're enjoying it.

>>34775
ah yes, it also helps mobile out a lot. the way it used to work the comics would be unreadable no matter what I did but now they are.

>>34776
I would go back and change the rest, but due to tumbler's... eccentricities, that would require me to essentially take down the entire site and repost it.

Not worth it.

Odds 3 is up and features the detailed account of Tap and Rita's first time doing the nasty.

Enjoy!

>>34807
awesome. I'll get right to reading it as soon as I get time.

>>34807
it was fantastic. Rita's perspective on the shop was particularly good.
Also I like the way how they're very terse with each other, or rather Tap is with Rita- there's not the four years of working together there yet.

there was no blood trail leading out of the cave I know where this is going :P

BY THE WAY I HOPE YOU LIKE PIPSTALKING

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/22731/5/fallout-equestria--anywhere-but-here/chapter-5--context-sensitive

>>34868
Awesome! Rita and Tap doing what they were paid for! And failing!
the changeling gag was pretty funny. you had me for a while there, thought they'd actually done it.

We met Offal too- I assume she's a ghoul, but I didn't see it stated explicitly. The implications are... Squishy

Looking forwards to the next chapter. Arbu. nothing can go wrong there. Nothing at all.

>>34877
I was afraid people would yell at me about the changeling thing, actually. I'm glad that you "got it", though.

Offal's shop is in Tenpony, and Tenpony doesn't allow ghouls. I basically imagine her as a Moria Brown that tolerates Tap's kleptomania in exchange for sexual favors.

Pretty sure the next chapter is the one that will either make people love this story or throw it down in disgust, but then, I feel that about most of what I have planned for this story. Chapter 6 isn't even the biggest source of worry by comparison hahaha

>>34879
Ah ok. Makes sense not to be a ghoul. I Wonder what she does having a name like Offal and why Rita hates her.

As for the next chaper: Oh no you killed Rita you heartless bastard! that's pretty much all that will make me hate it.
As much as I like their running around like Saturday morning cartoon villains and failing hilariously most of the time the story did come with disclaimers and I wouldn't mind if some people in Pips' party got killed.

>>34884
Rita doesn't hate her, Offal just doesn't like Rita because when Tap's having sex with Rita he's (usually) not also having sex with Offal and he's quite a sweetie in the sack.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/22731/6/fallout-equestria--anywhere-but-here/chapter-6--accountability

IN WHICH SHIT GETS REAL

My beloved and cherished backlog is no more. Now I am in the raw, with no content between myself and the hungry masses. I should probably get to work on chapter 7.

>>34940
You'd best follow your advice- the lone anon although weak has sharp teeth and an insatiable hunger for flesh.
Or is that Rita? Fuck I'm confused.

Reading the new chapter asap.

>>34940
All righty- chapter six. This was an absolute beast of a chapter, so this is a proper review written on a proper word processor and everything- so I'm going to look really dumb when this is riddled with grammar and spelling errors. There's going to be really serious spoilers in this and it's gonna be a wordwall so the whole thing is going to be spoilered to prevent accidental giving away of things when people just skim the front page of /fic/.


The beginning of the chapter seems in sharp contrast to the others, which are the recordings. This one (seems to be, at least) looks like Tap is in therapy. Talking about his dad is unsurprising, but it seems a bit disjointed compared to the other chapter openings. The only really relevant bit which I can find is that very last exchange, since Tap has a lot of introspection throughout this chapter. Maybe all will become clear later- time will tell.

All right, Arbu time. With all the foreshadowing in various forms it's pretty obvious this is going to be the defining chapter of this story right off the bat. The whole damn chapter is just one huge build-up to the fall that everyone (who read FoE at least) knows is coming- and it's gloriously done. Down from the ease Tap falls into his surroundings and the fresh bowl of 'radgator' soup (incidentally I once ate crocodile and alligator meat next to horse meat and there is one hell of a difference- for me reptile meat is almost completely unpalatable and I wouldn't recommend it. Whether or not a pony could tell I have no idea) he gets given, then the interactions with Skimmer's family.
In a relatively short period it's demonstrated clearly how close knit this group is, especially the dynamic between Skimmer and Tap. Have to admit, you got a raised eyebrow from me when it emerged Skimmer was allowed to watch Tap and Rita screw each other one time. That's definitely odd. Mind you, so's the fact that Skimmer killed and ate at least one person, quite possibly a regular civilian(s).

Good to see Tap's still in panic mode whenever he sees 'Pip and co, even if they don't know who he is. The first dream is odd, but I'll get to those later since they're in a relatively similar vein. I will note though the prophetic 'the die have not yet been cast'. Pointing to event immediately to follow.
The firefight between the Steel Rangers and the Party could well mean a lot of things if the ponies who are supposed to pay Tap and Rita are indeed dead (given that it's likely to be a scribe dealing with that sort of thing- probably). If not, their contract price might go up a lot. If they are dead though, it could cause conflict between Tap and Rita as to what to do next. Tap, motivated by revenge and Rita nonplussed by by the lack of caps (although Rita IS a sociopath so who knows).
Another key moment in the chapter is where Rita flies off- leaving all of the decisions on what to do squarely on Tap's shoulders- which is some more nice setting up for what is to follow.

More bonding time for Tap and Skimmer, as well as a very interesting set of reasons why Tap is still with Rita. I do wonder if he cares about Rita more than he's letting on but is unwilling to say that it's anything more than professionalism and sex. Time will tell, I guess. Also a nice nod back to the previous chapters where Tap is desperately trying to figure out what to get for her birthday.

Then the shit hits the fan and literally everyone dies. Ow.
It's a shame that Annette fired the AM rifle at the group in the street, drawing attention of both Steelhooves (of overkill is underrated fame) and Littlepip. Otherwise they may have had precious minutes to effect an escape through the back. The fight with Littlepip was intense. Two fighters with little formal combat training and riding high on hatred and adrenaline smashing into each other. Tap did have another chance to talk down Pip and salvage something but instead he exploded, damning everything which comes back to haunt him later.
One minor nagging thing though is how big exactly is this room and how much stuff is there in it? It would have to be the size of a standard classroom to have the cover and grenade play- if you set a grenade off in the middle of the ceiling of the average household room unless everyone's wearing a helmet they can expect to die or be horribly horribly maimed.
BUT I do appreciate this is running on rule of cool and fallout physics so it's not a huge thing. Especially when the setting is filled with talking magical equines before all of the FoE specific crap I can suspend my disbelief pretty high.

After watching Dredd I imagine the Dash inhalers to work a lot like Slo-Mo, since Dash is designed to be addictive and it seems Tap gets slightly high when he first uses one. It makes for some awesome visuals in my head which is all that matters.

The emotional sucker punch gets delivered in the burning ruins of the basement. Tap makes a fatal mistake and gets mortally wounded when has to watch one of his best friends (arguably the best) get gunned down by evil incendiary bullets right in front of him (whether she deserved it or not IMO depends on a few different variables, but since the story is from Tap's perspective not mine it makes no difference).
It is a pretty low blow after all the set up previously in the chapter, but it's the right call in this case I think, if only to totally fuck with Tap's head.

Speaking of which, he promptly passes out and goes into some trippy PTSD/shock related hallucination or something with Lady Luck and a healed Skimmer watching the end of the world. It was strange , although obviously meant to be. But it served the useful purpose of ramming home just how badly Tap has failed, while still being the similar dream with Lady Luck in which the apocalypse happens.
I've just played through Spec Ops. The Line and a lot of this chapter is sort of echoing the best parts of it. In particular I'm now wondering just how much of what Tap is seeing is real or whether his time in the Wasteland or something dreadful in the past (like the separation from his father being caused by him, as one possible example) being so great he's almost constructing something in his mind to escape it. Looking at Lady Luck in this particular chapter it's doubtful she's there at all.
In fact, looking through the other chapter no one but her victims and Tap see Lady Luck, so she could just be one crazy hallucination that masks over what's really going on.

Or there could be some legitimately weird shit going on. Given this is Fallout Equestria, it could go either way. It will be interesting to see where things go from here and the emotional impact it's going to have on Tap especially. The note in fimfiction comments about seeing skimmer again is classically cryptic. Could be as Pacce says and is just in the prequel, potentially flashbacks, dreams and hallucinations too. Or she actually comes back to life- legitimately weird shit certainly covers this.

So to conclude, really good chapter, probably the best so far. Good job!
You've already failed your mission. All that's left now is revenge...

>>34944
That... was an amazingly intelligent and in depth review. We're gonna have to hug. Now.

>>34944
Flattered does not even begin to describe how I feel about this. Thank you so much. Seriously. From the bottom of my heart.

Thank you :3

I was honestly really worried about posting chapter 6. Things like Arbu, an actual firefight with Littlepip, and Skimmer dying in the same chapter that she is properly introduced had me concerned with how the audience would receive it. I was going to postpone posting for as long as I could, and then, after going over it one last time, decided "I'm here, what the fuck are you gonna do?"

Having finally made it public, I'm really happy with the way its being received. Of course, there isn't a whole lot I can say about Skimmer or Lady Luck or where Tap is going from here that wouldn't be spoileriffic, but you're touching on some very, very interesting notes. You get a gold star for reading between the lines.

I really love that you're drawing parallels between Dash and Slo-Mo. Keep doing that. You're dead on the mark with that assumption, as that's basically how I've always imagined how it would alter one's perception. Seeing Dredd just reinforced the idea. I haven't played The Line (been meaning to!) but hold that thought, too. This story may not be told in first person, but the narrative is entirely subject to Tap's perception of the world around him.

When it comes to things like realism (grenade proximity), I always consider entertainment factor first. If it's plausible with a little suspension of disbelief, I'll do it, but I won't throw good story telling out the window just to make things more interesting. Also Skimmer's home was fairly large. It used to be a hardware store, so they had a pretty decent amount of space to work with.

Hopefully this is an adequate response. Thank you again for taking the time to review my work, and I'm really happy that you enjoyed the chapter!

>>34945
>>34946
No worries guys. Normally my reviews are rather simple affairs but sometimes I read a chapter that really merits the time to do it properly. I just wish I could do one for everything but I'd rapidly run out of both free time and intelligent things to say.
That was probably the most praise I've ever got for writing a review. Not really sure what to say.
Thanks.

>>34946
That's a more than fair response- as I keep saying elsewhere I don't really like spoilers, but I figure it's a good idea to put my perceptions of things into the longer reviews so if the writer is in fact angling for a certain atmosphere or relevation they can see if the writing has had the desired effect.

The point about realism is reasonable- really it's my fault for being relatively picky about that one issue. I think I might have touched on it before previously reviewing Tap's explosive encounter with the diamond dogs- but like I said in the main review above it is a very minor thing and it makes for a more exciting read. I should have probably twigged the home would have been relatively large, since Arbu is entirely made up of old shops. That an YOU CLEARLY STATED IT IN THE CHAPTER. How did I manage to miss that?!

Looking forwards to the next one. Forgot to mention, since I went rambling on about Lady Luck Tap realised at the end that his heart had stopped. Ending the best chapter on a cliffhanger-awesome. Especially since Rita is gone and who knows when she'll be back. For now, Tap is trapped in a burning basement with his nemesis, everyone we know is nearby who could help is already dead (bar Velvet Remedy-how messed up would Tap be if she saved him?), not to mention without intervention he'll be dead in a minute or so. It really ups the stakes for the next installment.

>>34946

If you're interested in getting the game, it's currently 75% off on Steam.

been incredibly busy with work and havent gotten the time to catch up with this but just the other day I remembered the Tumblr Anywhere Butt Here and to beyond my delight it was still updating.
I swear im going to try and make time for this story this week. good job for still being awesome. :D

>>35049
I have been waiting on your review before working on Chapter 4 of Odds and Ends. You're slowing down the whole operation!

>>35049
Hurry up and write a review! I can't wait for the next chapter >:(

>>35086
>>35087
ho jeez, I'm not nearly important enough for you to hold back because of me. but I can give an odds and ends review-ish thing if that's what you're looking for.
Really enjoy your writing style. its incredibly fun and can be really intense when need be.
When monsieur cerf de fer shot Rita. got my heart pumping. also He's not on my list of ponies i like(he hurt her Majesty, the most adorable and pretty bird-cat lady thing in the equestrian wasteland. And that is a Big no-no on the list of things to do and not do in a post apocalyptic environment) Just taking a wild guess, he's going to be making a Vader-esque return. i dunno, just kinda seems like an augmented return kinda situation.
I forgot about the detailed erotic-fun-times and it did catch me off guard. not saying it's a bad thing.
dont think you can really describe Tap with anything less than 'Badass'. well actually 'Romantic' comes to mind with the kitty-bird lovin's.
Very happy that Rita got her way in the end. Celestia knows she deserves it. well, ok not so much, but I want her to be happy so that has to count for something.

also need tap using the laser pointer and Rita chasing the dot picture please

really great chapters(but you already knew that)

Anywhere but here's chapters review thingy-ma-doober tomorrow. maybe. After the convention

I have a question.

how do you draw gryphons?
I cant draw for the life of me but i want to draw her empress so baaaaad.

:<

>>35147
Well, this random anon wants to draw her empress too. I'll try and get a rough guide up at some point if nothing's forthcoming. Just got a lot to do atm so no promisies.

Heeeeeey guys. Sorry that I haven't said much here lately. I'm trying to advance my main story missions in this stupid game called LIFE, and that's taking up a lot of my time. Rest assured, though, I will be back when time permits, and the magnificent train wreck that is Anywhere will stumble on.

>>35159
that's cool dude. I'm in the same boat. I have loads of stuff to do and the thought of getting any actual non work project done is just a dream.

>>35147
Anon always delivers! Even if it takes him a month :-/
But anyway, here's a rough guide to drawing Griffons by yours truly. I was going to draw Rita in this attempt too but it's getting really late and my pencil sharpener decided its going to summarily execute all of my pencils.
If this helps anyone, I'll be amazed because I'm really not very good. Also white balance is an alien concept to my camera and my photoshopping skills can remove only so much brown...

Essentially, Griffons in mlp are structurally very similar to the ponies, so you can start by drawing a series of circles, as you would with a pony (see fig.1). First draw a circle where you want the head to be, at its approximate size. thn the neck is half a head tall, the body another head tall and two heads long. The legs are also roughly a head- drawing circles here helps in the following steps.

You can draw in the characters' back at this stage. then standing upright as shown here, Griffons have a much flatter back compared to ponies, and their rump has a sharper angle, wheras with ponies there tends to be a curve which pronounces the upper haunch slightly.
Leg structure is again, similar to the ponies but the hind feet look feline and the front feet are an eagle's feet.
bird anatomy stuff spoilered below. Only loosely relevant to the guide
in reality an eagle's feet look nothing like they do on mlp style Griffons. If you're used to drawing birds, and in particular raptors like I am you have to be careful to avoid that trap. As an aside, with legs that thick a Griffon's front feet would be immensely strong- probably more than enough to snap your limbs- the muscle for the toes aren't in the exposed part of the legs- all you see there is bone, skin and tendons. The thicker the leg, the stronger the supporting bone structure can be and the more tendons to attach to bigger muscles on the upper leg, allowing for a huge crushing force. A European Eagle Owl can pop a tennis ball in one foot without its talons. Incidentally, the beaks of Griffons correspond more closely to those of falcons rather than eagles. Falcons tend to have more slender legs because they catch birds on the wing primarily and don't need to crush the life out of something substantial on a regular basis. This makes the Griffons look a bit odd sometimes to me.

The Griffons' necks are thicker than those of ponies' due to the feathers. Their heads are also flat topped, partially hidden by the prominent crests on their heads. Also note that the bare part of the upper beak (the Cere), extends further back than the un-feathered part of the lower jaw. However there is no visible distinction between Cere and beak, nor any difference in colouration of the mandibles.
You can see a more complete body with a face in fig.2. It is however worth noting that the eyes in fig.2. need to be slightly lower and possibly a little bigger in the y axis.

The tail is approx. two to three heads long and is a stylised lion's tail.

The wings when folded are an odd shape, like a boomerang with a sharper point towards the wingtips. The wings are two heads long and one head tall, including the kink. The wings will also cover up a large part of the Griffon so there can be much less work involved when drawing the body.

Hope this helps you to be able to draw Rita. I'll be having a go at her in the next couple of days.

Yay! A new chapter of Odds and Ends!
Here's the linkage becuse there isn't a link in the thread to the new chapter:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45014/4/anywhere-but-here-odds-and-ends/sex-blood-and-bottlecaps-part-2

Mainly a character development chapter with not a whole lot going on. No bad thing though, character development is always good. Especially with Tap and the darkness- is this a more simple version of 'Lady Luck' who appears more often later, or something... else? time will tell.
The next chapter will be good to see how they actually stick together, although given Tap isn't questioning the weird creepy shit they did at the diner and instead something much more mundane, I can see they have at least a few things in common. The teleport based shop in Mustangia was also a nice touch, as was the Derpy cameo (if I can call it that). Pahrita was awesome throughout as usual, equal parts gross and strangely adorable.

Might do a more extensive review later, I'm a bit short on time atm.

Oh wow!
I'm glad you liked it!
Have a picture you probably already have!
I look forward to hearing more of your thoughts.

>>35272
wanted to save posting until I had some form of assortment of lines and colors that one could make out as slightly resembling a sort of artwork.
That or if I ever got around to working on/finishing up that one fanfiction I said I would do so many months back

But then you just had to go and post a fun awesome new chapter.
The nerve.
Now I have to post saying how much I had enjoyed the new chapter. and how much I can't wait 'til the next one.
with out any form of content to show my appreciation of your work!

I hope you're happy with yourself.
Because you should be.
You did a very good job.

Hmmph *pouts*

Oh, and long live Empress Rita.